First of all, dumb disease
Definition: There is no language description of the characters in the composition.
Solution:
(1) People talk frequently, so we don't have to worry about the number of words (first solve the problem of food and clothing). Write fairy tales and let the people in them speak; Write a composition about pictures and let the people in the pictures speak. Write about small animals and let them talk.
(2) Use actions and expressions. Write a good reminder.
No. Shake your head, wave your hand and give each other a hard stare.
Yes Nod your head and sometimes make a "good" gesture.
Praise others. Smile and give a thumbs up.
Resentment and anger. Frown and clench your fists.
Nervous. Touch your nose, clothes and chin.
The "expression" when speaking: joy, anger, sadness, joy, silence, panic and indifference.
Second, malnutrition.
Refers to a single language expression.
Pay attention to other expressions of the same word when reading extracurricular books. (Knowledge points of using words and phrases in the sixth grade last semester)
Third, the problem of writing a composition
1. "Duplicate" disease
2. "Long-winded" syndrome (the ending should be short and powerful, giving readers a feeling of wanting more)
3. "parrot-like" disease (another form, the language expresses the same meaning "I'm blind, please help me" VS "It's a beautiful day, but I can't see." ; "Lying is not good" VS "Lying is a shackle around your neck"; "Persistence is victory" VS "Indeed, there is a kind of victory, and its name is victory." ; "Reading will change fate" VS "Good food makes wine, and wisdom makes books." VS "The gap between people, the gap between knowledge and books." )
Method:
Ask the bottle: How can others ride on your back if you don't bend over? ? Eating, everyone is very active; Learning, why not take the initiative?
Negative bottle: people who can't control themselves can't control others. ? Don't always put things on others. You don't want to do it, and neither does anyone else.
Digital Bottle: Some things have at least 50% hope if they are tried, and only 0% hope if they are not tried. Three hearts+two meanings = zero
Symmetrical bottle: small tolerance and generous, large tolerance and generous. ? You can't be fat in one bite, and you can't be a bully overnight.
Contrast bottle: too hard will only bring disaster, too soft will only bring bullying. A word can be made, but a word can be lost. ? Mobile phones increase communication in the distance and reduce communication in the vicinity.
Moral bottle: it's useless to open an umbrella if the shoes are leaking. Delicious shad have more thorns, but Longli fish with less thorns are not so delicious. Walking on a flat road will not leave footprints; Walking on the muddy road, leave one footprint at a time.
4. "Convergence" syndrome
This tells me ...
I have a deep understanding from this. ...
I learned a truth from it. ...
Method:
Word cohesion: indeed, yes, seemingly, not only that, but also truth.
Modal particle cohesion method: "hey"+truth (learn a lesson); "Haha"+truth (successful experience); "Hmm"+Truth (obtained through other people's words and things)
Punctuation cohesion: dash+truth
——202 1.4. 12
I. Definition of concepts
Just want to know what to say first, what to say again, where to say more and where to say less.
Second, the mystery of conception.
1. Materials with similar contents are combined together (all three materials say eye injury; Make the finishing point with one sentence: "Are my eyes so beautiful that even God is jealous?"
2. Combine materials in form
The first photo: a picture of a fat head, the second photo: a family photo, and the third photo: watching the Expo (comparing different sites of different ages: two-year-old station, seven-year-old station, eleven-year-old station)
A tailor turns a piece of cloth into a new dress, and a young writer writes a composition about one thing, so he should selectively give up "odd cloth" and give up.
First, what is the basis for the composition "cutting building materials"?
According to the central mood and the meaning to be expressed. Write closer to the center; Irrelevant slight writing, irrelevant center abandonment.
Example 1: Xiao Pang writes about a spring outing.
1. Before the spring outing, everyone grouped and bought snacks;
2. On the way, the students sang and the teacher told jokes;
3. Arrived at the amusement park, played the "Happy Wheel" and took a "pirate ship";
4. At noon, share their good things;
I had a little accident before I went home. A classmate is missing, and everyone is worried.
On the way home, everyone chattered and didn't feel tired at all, but the teacher was so tired that he dozed off. ...
Writing a composition must have a center, so that you can choose the materials you want according to the center.
(1) Writing Stimulation: Select Material 3.
(2) Write warmth: choose materials 2, 4 and 5.
Third, what about the rest of the materials?
Write down the temporarily unused materials in the accumulation book of composition materials.
Example 2: Observation materials of small virtues
1. The way the puppy sleeps is very interesting;
Dogs love to eat bones, and they look happy when they eat them.
3. The puppy is fat and white, and its eyes are really black, as if it will never wake up;
4. The puppy was naughty, took a shit in the living room and was beaten by his father. He quickly fled into his nest;
The dog accompanied me to the supermarket, and my aunt praised my dog for being clean and beautiful.
6. The puppy's ears are really smart, and his mother is still on the stairs. The puppy couldn't listen any longer, barking.
7. I teased the puppy, gave it a piece of meat and didn't give it food, but it was very anxious;
8. I forgot to take the foot cloth when I washed my feet and asked the dog to get it for me.
(1) "Eat": Materials 2 and 7.
(2) "Sleep": select 1, 3.
(3) "Qiaomin": Materials 6 and 8.
Iv. Suggestions on material selection: 1. Put "positive and negative" materials together.
Be a straight man and write a song.
How to write a tortuous composition? Look for stories with twists and turns, look for internal twists and turns, and try to write two or three of them in detail.
First, find a tortuous story (find a story of ups and downs)
Example: IP Man lost, IP Man pulled back a little, and IP Man turned defeat into victory.
Example:
1. Hearing the crickets, "I" secretly rejoiced;
2. Just in front of you, crying was interrupted;
3. "I" stopped and the cricket called again;
4. "I" jumped on cricket, and as a result, I opened my hand and saw nothing but a few weeds;
5. It turned out that the cricket escaped to my neck;
6. I can't catch it, although it is around my neck;
7. I thought of a good way and finally caught the cricket.
Without "twists and turns", what about writing a composition?
Second, look for inner "twists and turns" (inner emotional changes)
Example: Xiaomei cooks smoothly.
When cutting vegetables-are you worried that a sharp knife will cut your hand?
The oil is hot-are you worried that it will spill on your hands and face?
When tasting-will others think it's not delicious and say it's too salty and light?
Third, choose two or three twists and turns and try to write in detail.
The first turning point
1. "I" play games excitedly; To write about the excitement of "I", to write that I am immersed in the joy of playing games;
2. Dad loses his temper;
The second turning point is that dad's temper is terrible. Dad lost his temper. Dad's expression, his footsteps coming, his breathing when he was angry, his falling action, and the great shock and fear in my heart.
3. I do my homework.
-leads to the reader's mind.
The method of writing into the reader's mind;
From the reader's point of view, you must make readers understand what you have written, and attract readers to continue reading through exaggeration, suspense, personal changes and other methods.
First, let readers understand.
When writing a composition, the readers in your mind are not only your classmates, but also those who know about it, and think about people who don't know about it and who don't know you.
Second, attract readers (make readers like it)
1. The language will be exaggerated (not only to make the meaning clear, but also for fun).
Once, an extremely difficult math problem made my brain almost explode.
2. Suspense (can make less interesting stories attractive)
3. Changes in people
Small pieces of paper regret
Don't use the third person "it" to write small pieces of paper, but use the first person "I" to write small pieces of paper, so that small pieces of paper suddenly have feelings and life.
Budget before writing a composition: (word budget, paragraph budget, feature budget)
1. Word budget
More words than required 100 words. The beginning and the end shall not exceed 10% of the total number of words, and shall not exceed 50 words; The main part is 80% 400 words (60% 240 words in the first part and 40% 160 words in the second part).
2. Paragraph budget
A 400-word composition with no less than 4 paragraphs; An 800-word composition should be no less than 6-8 paragraphs.
Except in special circumstances:
If it is particularly important (for example, if you need to do a separate section), emphasize what he said. ) Two camphor trees in Soong Ching Ling's former residence, paragraph 65438 +0-3.
3. Close-up budget
(1) Write a few features on the budget.
1 story 1-3 features; Three stories, each with a close-up.
(2) How many words should be budgeted for each function?
450-word composition, 2 features, each 150 words; 600-700 words composition, 3 details, each feature is about 150-200 words.
(3) also determine where the close-up point is.
According to the center of the composition, only the places related to the center should be capitalized.
? ——202 1.4.20
? -Write actions to get rid of "generality"
The training of action strength is a bit difficult. Think in your mind about the actions you see with your eyes and turn them into words that describe and explain them.
How to overcome the problem of too general action;
Example: Pig Bajie ran to the river to drink water. (how to run? How to drink water? )
1. One big action changes several small actions.
Pig Bajie hurried to the river, whether the water was dirty or not, crouched down, pursed his ass, opened his mouth and began to drink water.
2. Write down the role in action
Example: eat apples in the competition.
Naughty Xiao Pang: Xiao Pang's mouth is open and closed, and there is a lot of space, as if he could swallow the whole apple. His lips are very thin, his teeth move up and down quickly, and he can only hear a dense "click" sound. Stuffed the remaining half of the apple in. I am embarrassed to spit out some apple seeds from my mouth.
Quiet Xiaomei: Pick up the apple and smell it. Small teeth bite the crisp apple. With a little effort, she pursed her mouth, as if she was afraid that we would see her bared teeth.
3. Select "Action Point" (central action can be displayed)
Action is not only "movement", but also emotion.
Example: Mom touched your head.
Mom hit you on the head. (Touching and hitting are action points)
Mom's angry action is "action point"
The teacher's angry action is the "action point"
The funny action of classmates is "action point"
4. Pay attention to the details.
Example: Mr. Guan put the needle and thread on several times and finally put it in.
What are the needles like? What is the line like? How to wear it? What's wrong with wearing it for the first time? If you can't get in, what lessons have you learned?
1 change: Mr. Guan put the thread in his mouth and took a bite. The loose threads fused together and passed through the eye of the needle. The thread is not smooth and always biased. The thread is loose again, so the teacher can put it in his mouth and bite it. So many times, finally through the past.
What is the action of holding the thread? What is the action of biting the thread? What is the process of threading the needle?
2 Change: The teacher holds the thread with his thumb and forefinger, puts the thread in his mouth, and gently licks his lips. When he takes it out, the thread is still a little forked and stuffed into his mouth. This time, Mr. Guan pressed his lips hard again and again, as if he wouldn't stop until he pinched the bifurcated silk thread together. Finally, the threads come together, sharp and thin, and this time they will definitely pass through the eye of a needle. Teacher Guan holds the needle in his left hand and the thread in his right hand, aiming at the eye of the needle. Shake one hand gently, take a deep breath, calm down, put it on, put it on, put it on, put it on. Teacher Guan put down the thread in his right hand and prepared to thread it through the eye of a needle. Who knows, the left hand holding the needle shook and the thread fell out again. Haha, I don't care about the teacher ..........
Example: Modify the following paragraph with "Four Writing Actions"
My sister and I competed to eat apples.
I ate all the apples in three bites. People as old as my sister can't eat as fast as me! I think the competition to eat apples is really interesting.
"Three" should be written one by one. (One big move for a few small moves)
The difference between "I" and "Sister". (Write down the personality in action)
Why did I eat so fast during the game? Write my mental description. (Select action point)
Change: I opened my mouth wide and bit off a small part of the apple. I chew my teeth quickly. Before I finished chewing, I opened my mouth again and took a second bite. My cheeks are bulging. After a series of intensive clicks, I swallowed all the apples in my mouth, although I didn't know whether the apples were sweet or sour. I stuffed all the remaining apples into my mouth without hesitation, and I didn't care about my dad who was laughing next to me. After another intensive "click-click" sound, those apples that have never been bitten at all have reached my stomach. In this way, I killed a big apple with three bites. (Actions, personalities, ideas, details)
expressiveness
-Write vivid characters with "expressions".
How to write other people's hearts?
One's own voice, action, expression (×)
The expression of others-revealing one's heart
There is an unpleasant smell of smoke in the classroom. Teacher Chen stood at the door angrily, trying to rush over. When Mr. Chen saw us get out from under the table, he was so scared that he didn't move. We were all nailed there like wood.
1. Add an expression description.
There is an unpleasant smell of smoke in the classroom. Mr. Chen stood at the door angrily, his head was steaming, and there were several glistening beads of sweat on the tip of his nose. His eyebrows were raised angrily, but his mouth was grinning. When he saw us coming out from under the table, he was so surprised that he forgot to blink. The flesh on his face froze and people didn't move, just like the "freeze frame" in the movie. We all settled down there like fools.
2. Choose the expression "General Five Tigers"
Eyes, eyebrows, teeth, nose, mouth
They don't usually go out together. When describing, generally choose one or two, two or three.
Write "wooden head" I saw that his mouth grew bigger and bigger in Zhang Yue, and he stopped in mid-air and forgot to close it for a long time.
Example: write happily.
He smiled, his eyes narrowed, and his small eyes seemed to be almost gone. As soon as his mouth opened, he pulled out a crescent-shaped jagged front tooth. Some fell in and laughed, while others ran out to laugh.
Panic? Worried?
field force
You can set the time, set it in your heart, and then take your time, one by one. Who do you want to write, just let it move and read it carefully and repeatedly in your mind.
1. Write scenes and watch the actions, expressions and words of those people repeatedly in your mind.
Grandma Liu plays "pistachio"
Grandma Liu stood up and said loudly, "Lao Liu, Lao Liu, eat like a cow." Don't look up after eating an old sow! "Say that finish, but she bulging cheeks, eyes looking straight ahead, without saying a word. At first, they paused, and then they all burst out laughing together. Xiangyun couldn't hold on, and a mouthful of tea gushed out. Daiyu laughed out of breath, holding the table and calling, "Oh dear! ".Baoyu rolled into the grandmother's arms, and the grandmother smiled and hugged him, calling him" sweetheart ". Mrs. Wang smiled and pointed at Feng, but she couldn't speak. Aunt Xue couldn't stay up, and the tea in her mouth was sprayed on Tanchun's skirt. Tanchun's tea bowls are all on Yingchun. Xichun left her seat, grabbed the wet nurse and called "rubbing her intestines". Everyone smiles differently. )
It is different to find that everyone is doing the same thing at the same time.
2. Write the scene, freeze the time in your mind and write a close-up.
Two close-ups of Tangshan earthquake
The first close-up
During the earthquake, the square stool and Fonda were both pressed at both ends of the floor, only one, and the mother chose to save her brother.
The second close-up
Thirty-two years later, the square stool went home for the first time and pushed open the door.
Close-up in movies is to enlarge some important information that the audience may not pay much attention to, and quickly grasp the audience's heart through close-up amplification.
Feature selection
My sister couldn't write that word well, and my mother taught her how to write it well. Which shot needs close-up? )
Write the most touching and attractive scene, that is, the close-up that best reflects the center.
There shouldn't be too many close-ups in a work, one or two is enough.
Change:
Mother stood behind her sister, leaned forward, wrapped her right hand around her, and gently held her right hand. This thin sister seems to have a warm harbor. "The horizontal direction should be flat, the vertical direction should be straight, the folding should stop, and the words with corners will look good." My mother told me while demonstrating. My sister's eyes are tightly fixed on her mother's moving hand. His little hand moves with her hand, and all her eyes are focused on that one. ...
Title force
Irresponsible topic:
Unforgettable events, unforgettable events, the most unforgettable events and my unforgettable events.
Responsibility topic:
Depressed 99 points, I hate your eight generations of slapstick laughter.
How can we have a good "voice" topic?
1. Do the opposite.
"Bring an axe to the door" and "How can three heads are better than Zhuge Liang" (three heads are better than Zhuge Liang)
2. Names of movies, televisions, books and songs used or adapted.
"Wandering Classroom" movie The Wandering Earth; "I just met you" song "I just met you"
1. Choose a word, sentence or phrase in the composition as the topic.
"You must release this fish" and "Tomato Sun"
Give the following story a "good title".
Synopsis of story:
A female classmate forgot to bring a ruler when she wrote the exam. A classmate folded her ruler in half and gave her half. She is very grateful.
Broken ruler, broken ruler
Sentence paragraph force
The beginning of a good composition can only be used in this article, not in that article. It should be unique and tailored.
Sunset begins.
After dinner, red clouds came up, and the child's face was red by the fire. The great white dog turned red, red rooster turned gold, and the black hen turned rosewood. ...
How to make a good start?
1. Concise, straight to the point, not polite.
2. Start with the most attractive words (words, actions, contradictions, feelings).
The beginning of Feng Jicai's Pearl Bird.
Very good! My friend gave me a pair of pearl birds, which I kept in bamboo cages. There is a mass of hay in the cage, which is a comfortable and warm nest for birds.
Exodus: I am shocked! I am really shocked!
3. Write the beginning of the scene (don't write a set of scenes)
Grandpa Xiaohong's garden
There is a big garden in my home. There are bees, butterflies and grasshoppers in this garden. Butterflies include white butterflies and yellow butterflies. This kind of butterfly is very small and not very beautiful. The beautiful butterfly is red and covered with gold powder.
The power of stories
? -fatten your composition.
How to write a good story?
Words should be added to the main line of the story, not at the beginning and end.
1. When telling a story, tell your heart (inner feelings).
Hand out leaflets? That's public embarrassment! It doesn't matter. Dad didn't say anything about sending it to passers-by anyway. Isn't it just like small advertisements are often stuffed in front of my house, and they are stuffed in front of my neighbor's house unnoticed? It's done.
Writing a composition is not only what you see in front of your eyes, what you hear in your ears, what you hear in your nose, but also what you think.
2. Tell stories so that people in the composition can talk.
3. Let the people in the composition move
4. Tell stories and add characters' expressions
Use four methods to gain weight. The following story.
Synopsis of story:
A classmate found that he forgot to bring a ruler before the exam. The boy in the back seat folded the new ruler in half and gave her a piece. She is very grateful.
Ending force
Writing a composition is not only telling a story, but also making people get truth, enlightenment, emotion and edification from it.
Unique cheats of finishing power:
1. Cut off the tail and hide the truth in the story.
Example:
give up/offer one's seat (to sb)
……
After listening to my aunt's words, I couldn't help blushing ... (thinking of others and feeling guilty)
2. Don't chop off your tail, write deeply. The author is aware of a new and unexpected fact.
Example:
At the mysterious end of the valley
Indeed, bending is not for falling and destruction, but for better survival and development.
The end of Aesop's fable
Don't cut off your tail, write a novel.
Example:
At the end of the belief that bad luck cannot be broken
In the long journey of life, there will inevitably be some bumps, but as long as there is an unbreakable belief in bad luck, the light of hope will dispel the clouds of despair.
Failure is the mother of success. VS If there are 100 roads, when you take 99 failed roads, then the remaining one is victory and success.
(1) symmetry formula
Small forbearance is generous, and great forbearance is generous. You can't be fat in one bite, and you can't be a bully overnight.
(1) Rhetorical formula (3) Negative formula
(2) Comparing one sentence can make one thing, and one sentence can also defeat one thing.
(3) Hint
A lazy cat can't catch a mouse unless it is a dead mouse. With your shoes exposed, it's no use holding an umbrella.
Write down the end of the scene
The end of Confucius' spring outing
The spring on the banks of Surabaya River is stronger. The friendship between teachers and students is stronger.
linguistic competence
1. In other words, write your personality.
There are many fleas.
It was dark and there were fleas everywhere. The whole body is unbearable to Qiyang. VS Montmartre's "Flea Market" and Jerusalem Temple's "World Flea and Tick Conference" were held in this Eurasian hotel.
He looks fierce. He may have eaten bombs instead of eggs in the morning.
1. Write in your own words (your breath, your personality)
Translate information in your own language.
2. Write the hazy beauty of language
Vaguely write about the beauty of girls.
Adding one point is too long, subtracting one point is too short, the powder is too white, and the vermilion is too red.
Xia Guang walked through the Western Hills, and I walked on the road covered with buttonwood leaves. VS At 4: 55 pm, I was walking on the road opposite the school.
3. Eliminate "I" syndrome, "I want" syndrome, conjunctions, repetitions and conjunctions (first, then, then and finally).
What is "I" disease? Always saying "I, I, I" is "I" disease.
Write down your thoughts. Always write what I think, what I think in my heart, and I think as I walk.