Tags: Deduction of Material Composition, Examination, Conception, Selection of Materials, Inheritance and Discussion, Education Classification: Education and Teaching
Writing as required (60 points)
A wealthy businessman was walking when he met a young man selling second-hand books at a street stall. He curled up in the cold wind and ate moldy bread. The rich businessman piteously put $8 into the young man's hand and left. I didn't go far, but I came back. I picked up two books from the stall and said, "Sorry, I forgot to take them. In fact, you are a businessman like me! " Two years later, a wealthy businessman was invited to a charity fundraiser. A young bookseller held his hand tightly and said gratefully, "I always thought that I could only make a living by setting up stalls in my life, until you personally told me that I was a businessman like you, which helped me build up my self-esteem and self-confidence, thus contributing to today's achievements ..." It is not hard to imagine that it was this rich businessman's respectful words that made great changes in young people's lives.
Please write an article of not less than 600 words (except poetry) in your own style around "respect makes people (me) gain confidence".
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This is the first time I have a class with my classmates. Before commenting on the composition, I want the students to understand several concepts: writing, composition and literature (bottom-up blackboard writing). In interpersonal communication, there are needs of communication, expression, reporting, legend and so on, just like moaning in illness, shouting in pleasure, telling stories in adventure and complaining in grievances. Writing is the natural expression of this practical need. Diaries, letters, travel notes, papers, summaries, blogs, etc. You can call it writing. Just start writing (typing) and leave words. Show students' works:
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Contrastive analysis of the expression effect explains the "transition" of writing and points out that the latter can be called "literature". "Don't wait for the bridge to be built" (this sentence can also be sold if the students have a good foundation). Obviously, the gap between "writing" and "literature" is what we often call "literary talent"
So what is "composition"? Composition is "writing" with strict requirements, and the purpose is to examine your "literary talent". Attention, students, I have only one key word for the definition of composition, and that is "requirement", in other words, the composition question. Review this composition question again. )
Students should know that there are four steps in writing a composition: examining the topic, making an idea, selecting materials and planning an article (written vertically on the blackboard). Check this composition: look at the blackboard.
The conception of a composition is the most exquisite, so what is "conception"?
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The material is the "willow tip" by the river. The idea of one article is "fishing", but the idea of another article has become "thinking about each other". How to choose depends on the composition requirements. It is worth noting that the intention of this composition is very clear, and you are not required or allowed to start a new stove. That is: respect makes people confident (blackboard writing)
The third step of composition is "selecting materials". Before choosing, we must be clear about the scope, purpose and effect of the choice.
Scope: respect;
Objective: To make them confident;
Effect: the contrast should be obvious, and the contrast before and after is large.
Since the "effect" in the material is that poor booksellers become rich booksellers; Then the "effect" in the composition should be changed from "inferiority" to "confidence", and the catalyst in the middle is "respect". Blackboard writing:
The idea before writing is roughly like this-whether the material you choose is good or not, also called "deduction", has a verification standard, that is, the distance between the material you choose and the expression center is the best. So how to deduce the topic, and see:
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Every sentence in A Math Teacher's Wedding is closely related to Math, Teacher or Wedding. If the topic is "Chinese", can you still write it like this? If you change "wedding" to "illness", you can't write it like this-it can be seen that the relationship between "text" and "topic" is so close that it can't be messed up.
Since the writing of "The Wedding of a Math Teacher" should include "Math", "Teacher" and "Wedding", this time "respect makes people confident" must be included in the writing of "respect", "cultivation" and "confidence". It is not enough to write only respect, let alone self-confidence. It is not enough to write only respect and self-confidence without reflecting the relationship between them.
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Problems in this composition
A digression Wan Li, unintelligible.
Regardless of "respect", even if "confidence" is written well, it is beside the point. If "self-confidence" is irrelevant, people will be "unintelligible"
Second, the East is effective and plagiarism is serious.
Please explain what is "effective". Uncovering the ugliness of "Dong Shi": simple style-changing buying books into holding pens; Micro-intelligence-turning charity into employees; The model is: respect-confidence-success! Think for yourself, will success be that simple? There are even "plagiarists", who enlarge raw materials or change their faces to imitate them, which is wrong.
Third, forced discussion is full of fallacies.
Although "style" can be "optional" in the topic requirements, we only have the choice of "narration" and "discussion" In fact, 80% of the students have written narratives, 10% have written argumentative papers, and 10% are "four unlike". I give some advice to students who like to write argumentative papers. This article is not suitable because it is not easy to write. The argument is clear: respect makes people confident; What about the argument? We * * * want to find some; What about the argument? Some arguments will make you laugh. What Zhong Er was respected by the king of Chu, and he succeeded; What Kong Ming is respected by Liu Bei, Zhuge Liang is confident; Who else is not respected? He committed suicide ... Is the conclusion drawn from these examples convincing? Just like the last time I wrote Opponents, many students argued that after Qin unified the six countries, there was no opponent and they died. ...
I really want to talk about it. You have to analyze and demonstrate from the perspectives of psychology, sociology, relations and so on. We can't control it. The only useful school motto is that students who write argumentative essays turn a blind eye. There is such a passage in the publicity column of our school, which is very suitable for argument, but have you ever cared?
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My suggestion is to write less argumentative essays. In fact, there is a guide for you to write a narrative in the title-the "I" in brackets is a hint.
Fourth, write in detail about respect and extreme self-confidence.
This exam is barrier-free, and almost all students know how to write respect. Unfortunately, quite a few students ignored the "prompting" relationship between respect and self-confidence, but wrote about how to be respected. Only in the end, respect gave me self-confidence. The structure of the article that really meets the meaning of the question should be the beginning of "unconfidence"-the end of "confidence", and the changing factor in the middle is "respect".
Five, dripping respect, Wang Yang self-confidence.
The disadvantage of universality is that the so-called "respect" is insignificant and the "self-confidence" gained is exaggerated. Common phenomena are: a smiling face does not feel inferior; The PE teacher patted him on the shoulder and his cramped leg came alive. Parents bought a mobile phone and were respected, so they became confident ... as if giving you a little sunshine, you would be brilliant; Give you a gift and you can go to heaven!
Appreciation of perfect composition
First, the buckle is tight and the materials are fine.
What questions to deduct and how to deduct them have been talked about a lot before, so I won't repeat them here. Here I focus on "material selection" and teach you how to "make materials" by the way. If "respect" can "make" people confident, then this respect must be shocking, infectious and inspiring. The best ways to appear are "sudden" and "unexpected". The above factors determine the sender of respect, preferably a relative stranger.
Second, high thinking and good literary talent.
The level of intention is to respect the strength, and the strength depends on the change of self-confidence, which comes from the comparison before and after. In other words, turn the ugly duckling into a white swan and Cinderella into a beautiful princess ... don't forget that the reason for "change" is "respect".
Third, the beginning is smooth and the turning point is wonderful.
Examining questions and thinking are often very different, while selecting materials and writing articles are basic skills that need to be honed for a long time. There is no shortcut except reading and writing more.
Ability development: composition questions
A cargo ship was sailing in the Atlantic Ocean, and a black boy doing chores at the stern accidentally fell into the sea. Although he shouted loudly, no one heard him. The black boy believed that the kind and friendly captain would come to save himself, so he got up the courage to swim forward. The captain found that the child was missing, ordered to return, and finally arrived when the child was about to hold on. When the child woke up, he knelt on the ground and thanked the captain for saving his life. He told the captain, "I knew you would come to save me!" " At this time, the white-haired captain sat down in front of the black child and burst into tears: "Son, I didn't save you, you saved me! "I'm ashamed of my hesitation at that moment ..."
Please write a composition of about 600 words on the topic of "trusting others and being trusted", make your own suggestions, choose your own style and write your own title.
[Analysis Tip]
Hei Hai overcame his fear of death because he believed that the captain would come to save him. The captain was moved to tears because he was trusted by Hei Hai, and his soul was sublimated. To believe in others is to have a full understanding of the goodness of human nature and firmly believe that true feelings are dominant among people. It is conceivable that if a person always treats others with suspicion and suspicion, it is not only difficult to establish friendship with others, but also lose happiness in his heart because of the shadow. Being trusted will produce a noble emotional experience, which can stimulate upward motivation and purify the soul. There are many examples in life, and people are constantly moving towards moral self-improvement because they are trusted.
A society lacking mutual trust is morbid and deformed. In order to build a harmonious society, it is necessary to build mutual trust between people. It may not be difficult to "trust others", but it is difficult to "be trusted", not by making promises to others, but by focusing on casting your own personality, strengthening your moral cultivation and showing your personality charm in small things.
This topic can be written as a story, which makes sense, and deduces the philosophy between "trusting others" and "being trusted" in vivid details and vivid stories. If you make a comment, you don't have to share the relationship between the two. You can focus on "being trusted". One is that this point is rarely discussed, and the other is that there are more connotations to discuss.
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