Zong Lizhi of Beijing West Road Primary School

Yesterday morning, my mother and I happily got on the bus and went shopping on Shanxi Road.

After a stop, a young man came over and sat in the only empty seat. Behind him came an old woman in her seventies, standing beside the young man. At this time, the car horn sounded the voice of giving up your seat to the old, the weak and the sick. But the young man didn't seem to hear, and still didn't give his seat to his grandmother. A middle-aged woman standing said, "Young man, please give your seat to this old lady." But the young man said confidently, "What's the excuse? Aren't they all learning the quality of soldiers now? " Why didn't he let me? "The young man said, pointing to a veteran. The veteran was very angry after hearing this. He suddenly stood up and said, "Madam, please sit in my seat." With that, he helped his grandmother to her position, and the old soldier stood there holding the handle of the chair. It's really hard for me to understand that a young man has no cultural quality at all and can't respect the old and love the young. This kind of person is meaningless to live. At this time, the bus arrived at the station and the veteran limped off. At this time, I was shocked and suddenly at a loss. The veteran turned out to be a disabled person, watching his tall figure disappear into the crowd. Look at the young man who got off the bus.

When I got home after shopping, I couldn't calm down for a long time. The quality of the old army is really precious and unexpected, and the young people are even more unexpected. Under everyone's criticism, he has a point. We should learn from the old soldiers' spirit of respecting the old and loving the young, instead of being uneducated like young people.

Comments: the theme is very clear, the article describes the image, and the psychological feelings are true and reasonable!

(Instructor: Ye Haibao)

What a surprise

Xu Yangyang mechanics primary school

The 2002 World Cup in Korea and Japan was really unpopular. France, Argentina and other football powers left early, which makes people feel that the distance of world football is shortening. I also feel that this World Cup is too unexpected.

I remember the opening match, the last champion France played Senegal. My classmates and I think it is a piece of cake for France to beat Senegal, who entered the World Cup for the first time. Yes, France not only has a solid defense line and excellent goalkeepers, but also the world's best midfielder Zidane and Premier League top scorer Trezeguet. People are also looking forward to a big war. Shortly after the opening, the French team has been controlling the initiative on the field and threatening the door of Senegal. Senegal was not discouraged and fought back vividly. Just when I was in high spirits, Senegal's goal sounded the alarm for France in the 39th minute. I don't think so, how powerful France is, this goal is just to let nature take its course, and the fun is yet to come! Sure enough, the French team made an all-out counterattack, but the Senegalese team firmly held the goal and did not slack off. One minute before the end, France still had few decent shots, so it had to "look at the door and sigh." When the referee blew the final whistle, I began to disbelieve my ears. The French team actually ... I thought indifferently: Never mind, there are still two games left! However, France lost 0: 0 and 0: 2 again, and there was no quiet 16. I am desperate. The French team didn't win a game and didn't score a goal, so they "went home". Football powers have also begun to realize that their advantages are no longer obvious, and more unpopular will appear.

I hope the French team will rally, make a comeback and see the glory again!

Comments: The theme is vivid, and the writing is smooth and natural, which is the result of "paying attention to life"!

(Instructor: Ye Haibao)

What a surprise

Wang Wenjun, Primary School Affiliated to Nanjing University of Science and Technology

My parents have never given me a birthday before. Whenever I ask, I always say, "When is your birthday?" But at the age of eight, things changed.

It was Saturday. When I slept in and got up, I found that subtle changes had taken place in my family. The floor is clean, the table is spotless, and the windows are polished. There is still a pile of things on the table, covered with cloth. Just about to open it, I suddenly remembered that I accidentally opened my father's file last time, and I was almost beaten, so I had to retract my hand. At this time, mother came out of the kitchen, opened the cloth bag and said, "Happy birthday to our little birthday girl!" " "Wow, it's a birthday cake! There are some gift boxes! I thought happily: Today is my birthday, how could I forget it? I saw my father still holding a beautiful skirt: white and pink lace with a small flower in the middle. I tied up my skirt and went to look in the mirror. Hey, how I look like a beautiful angel in the mirror! I said sweetly to my parents, "Thank you! That's very kind of you! " I really want to open the gift box, but my mother mysteriously said, "I'll see it in the afternoon!" " "I had to agree. Finally in the afternoon, I couldn't help it any longer. I opened the white gift box: I saw a lovely koala toy inside. Then open the yellow box: there are three books in it: Up and Down Five Thousand Years, Underground Travel and Father and Son. Then open the pink box: there is a beautiful Barbie doll inside. Finally, I opened the red box: there was a small box inside. I opened it and said, "Ah!" A black monster! I ran away in panic. When I calmed down and took a closer look, it turned out to be a gecko made of plasticine! In the evening, my parents sang birthday songs for me, ate cakes and lit candles, and spent a pleasant evening with me.

What a surprise!

Comments: The article is more real, showing the "unexpected" scene in detail, and it is very sincere to read; Wouldn't it be better to strengthen the "unexpected" in the process!

(Instructor: Ye Haibao)

What a surprise

Augus mechanics primary school

"Hello, classmates and teachers! I want to choose the squadron leader of our class ... "This girl is the top student in our class: Li Danting. But this time she lost the election, that is, she was only one vote away from her opponent.

I found Li Danting's nose was red, tears were swirling in her eyes, and her hands were shaking slightly. A few minutes later, the re-election of the deputy squadron leader began. I glanced at Li Danting quietly, and she stopped crying. I am really happy for her. Who knows that Li Danting stepped onto the podium again and said to the students: "Students, although I didn't become the squadron leader, I am not discouraged or discouraged. I will always respect you, and I will certainly do what others can do! ! "Li Danting voice down, there was a warm applause on the stage. God pays off, and Li Danting finally became the deputy squadron leader with the winning votes. ...

I never expected Li Danting to be so strong. In the second grade, I cried my eyes out because I didn't become the monitor. Think back to what my mother said: Everything is participation. It doesn't matter if a person with courage and confidence loses the election. And those who don't have the courage to go up are still laughing at those who have lost the election. This is the most shameful thing. This is not unreasonable.

Comments: Seeing the big from the small, the little author can grasp the fragments of life and feel something, not bad! The article is concise and the theme is prominent!

(Instructor: Ye Haibao)

What a surprise

Hankou road primary school agile

On Sunday, the weather is sunny, the warm sunshine shines on the earth, beautiful butterflies are dancing among the flowers, and hardworking bees are enjoying themselves. My mother and I walked out of the crazy street arm in arm.

When I came to Xinjiekou, there was a sea of people, and my mother and I barely squeezed into a bookstore. All the books in the bookstore attracted me. I was just about to look through them when my mother took my hand and dragged me out. I was just about to ask the reason when I saw three young people swaggering into the bookstore, and customers in the bookstore fled. I watched them carefully. All three young people have yellow hair, earrings on their ears, fashionable vests and a black dragon tattooed on their arms. I was watching them, and my mother quickly pulled me out. Only then did I find those three young people coming towards us. My mother and I quickly avoided them and went to the crazy shopping mall. There are so many things in the shopping mall that people are dazzled and confused. I just wanted to see a new watch, but suddenly my mother took it away. The road was very narrow, and we met three young people again. Three young people walked past us casually, only to hear a "crash". I found a 50-cent coin falling out of a young man's trouser pocket. The young man didn't seem to hear anything and walked on. I think he must be too lazy to bend down to pick it up. I'll help him pick it up. So, I picked up a dime and chased it and said, "Uncle, you lost your money!" " "The young man turned around and knocked out the coin in my hand, saying," Damn, you are a poor man, and you also picked up fifty cents! ""I cried with injustice, shook my injured little hand and ran to my mother's side, gently asking, "Mom, did I do something wrong?" Mother said angrily, "you didn't do anything wrong, but they did!" " "An aunt sarcastically said," Hey, you have money, why don't you pay more so that we can follow suit! " "An old man also said," We should let them go back to my time and be hungry! " "Everyone accused him noisily, and the three young people despondently picked up the coins and left.

On the way home, I said insightful, "I didn't expect that they wasted so much money!" " "My mother asked me," Xiaojie, think about it. Not only did they lose fifty cents, but more importantly, what did they lose? " I replied loudly, "He has lost his good habit of thrift." Mother smiled with relief.

Comments: profound thought, vivid and concrete, outstanding theme!

(Instructor: Ye Haibao)

What a surprise

Shigulu Primary School Fan Changchun

"letter! Your letter! " My brother said, waving his hand as if he were going to play hide-and-seek with me. I rushed forward, grabbed the letter, and a delicate bookmark slipped quietly. Looking at the signature of the letter, my mood can't help stirring up waves. ...

That was the second grade. After lunch, I read in the classroom. There is an exquisite bookmark in the book, which was given by my sister at the full moon. My sister wants me to form a good habit of reading from an early age. The bookmark says "diligence". Qian Qian, who happened to be my best friend, ran in from the outside and dropped my bookmark. Unfortunately, there is a piece of bubble gum on the ground, and the bookmark is lying motionless on the bubble gum. I suddenly flew into a rage, threw the book away and went to Qian Qian. "Why did you drop my bookmark on the ground? You pay! " As I spoke, my tears could not help falling. Qian Qian said, "I'm sorry, I didn't mean to. I'll pay you one! " "Before she finished, I ran away and never looked back. Because Qian Qian's family kept trying to transfer her to another school, we never met again. It's been several years, and this matter has long been forgotten.

"I didn't expect it, I really didn't expect it." I muttered to myself, and my brother looked at me with a puzzled face. Although the bookmark Qian Qian gave me is not as exquisite and beautiful as my sister's, it contains countless friendships between us. Look, there are two peacocks on the bookmark, how much like me and him!

The friendship of friends is really precious and important!

Comments: Good, good language skills, good emotional expression and outstanding theme!

(Instructor: Ye Haibao)

"selfish ghost" publishes a book

Zhu Qi, Mechanical Primary School

The new semester has begun, and our whole class is sitting in the classroom waiting to hand out new books. The teacher asked several students to stand in front of the podium and hand out books to them. One of them was a famous "selfish ghost" in our class. When the selfish ghost sent me the Chinese book, there were only two books left. He looked at it, put one of the books in his bag and gave me the other. When I came home from school, I set out from Bao Shu. I saw many pages on the supporting documents, and many papers were scrawled. I can't help but think of the little tricks of "selfish ghosts" At that time, I was very angry and thought that "selfish ghost" had put a good book in the bag.

The next morning, I took the book, walked to his seat, slapped it on his desk and said angrily, "Why do you think this book you gave me has so many corners?" Did you give yourself a good book when you sent it? "

At first, he said kindly, "I didn't give myself a good book." You misunderstood me. " I said grumpily, "You are a famous selfish ghost. You must have given yourself a good book when you sent it. " Then he shed tears of injustice.

I picked up his book and tore it open. I was shocked: there was a big hole in his book.

I really shouldn't. I was wrong about the good guys. ...

Comment: The book "Selfish Ghost" is not selfish, which really surprises you. Novel material selection and smooth narrative.

(Instructor: Qian Yunning)

"microwave oven" storm

Song Ziwen langya rd primary school campus

That was when I was a kid. I remember that at that time, our family just bought a microwave oven. As soon as I got home from the microwave oven, I studied hard and always wanted to find time to play.

What a surprise! God bless me. This afternoon, my parents were not at home, and I was very happy. At noon, not long after dinner, my parents went out together and told me to look after the house well, not to touch electricity or water. At that time, all I could think about was playing with the microwave oven, so those words went in one ear and out the other. As soon as mom and dad left, I moved a small bench, stood on it, turned the "starter" of the microwave oven to the right, and only heard a "beep-",and the microwave oven started. I was not afraid at that time, sitting on the ground and watching. "Oh, no, it must be burnt in the microwave oven." I was sweating with fear, so I turned off the microwave oven. "Knock, knock, knock ..." Listen, my heart is beating fast. I was scared to death. I ran back to my room and did something else. I dare not move or look at my "broken" microwave oven. I'm afraid, I'm really afraid, afraid that mom and dad will come back and hit me at night.

That night, my mother asked me if I wanted to eat rice cooked in the microwave oven. I shook my head again and again because I was afraid that my mother would find out that I had broken the microwave oven. I also had a dream of microwave oven at night, which scared me to death. I woke up the next morning and found my mother cooking in the microwave oven. I read it and asked, "Is the microwave oven broken?" ? Mom smiled and said, "This is good, how can it be bad!" " "I enjoyed the meal that day.

After my mother knew what happened, she told me how to use it, and I realized that the microwave oven was fast and convenient, so I couldn't set the time at will. Ah! The era of high technology is really good!

Comment: The author thought the microwave oven was broken, but it wasn't. This is unexpected. Interesting material selection and more vivid narrative!

(Instructor: Qian Yunning)

I didn't expect cousin to be so bad.

Langya rd primary school Hu campus

I have a cousin who is in Grade Two. She is cute and naughty. She has 1000 complaints about me every day. My cousin is very clever and always wants to bully me. Sometimes I didn't expect her to be so naughty and disobedient. But my naughty cousin was so naughty when she swam with me this year, and I was teased by her.

One noon this summer vacation, my sister and I went swimming. It turned cold that day, no one was there, and there were only two of us in the empty swimming pool. I swam in the water, and my sister watched, splashing water on me from time to time, laughing and finally having a good time. Just when I was "proud", my cousin suddenly jumped into the deep pool, dived a few times and shouted for help. I panicked and quickly jumped into the deep pool, stepped on the water and hugged her neck. She repeatedly shouted: "Sister ... I'm going to die!" "Help me", I managed to pull her up. She pushed her up and climbed ashore. I was breathless with fatigue and scared to death. Unexpectedly, my sister smiled and said, "My big sister, I can't even save people. See how your mother will give me to you in the future! " I don't trust! "Say that finish, plop into the water. I shouted angrily, "I'll tell you later!" " "After swimming for a while, she went ashore, immediately changed a fake fishy smile, left the couch and rubbed my back. I knew what tricks the dead boy was going to play and said warily, "What are you going to do?" "Make amends," she said cheekily. Then he asked me on a small scale, "Are you really angry?" I said, "Well, I'm angry." Suddenly relieved a lot. Unexpectedly, she said angrily, "Just be angry with yourself!" Helpless, I was cheated again.

I didn't expect my cousin to be so naughty.

Comment: Cousin is really "naughty", which is unexpected! The selection of materials in this article is full of childlike interest, and the narrative is vivid and concrete!

(Instructor: Qian Yunning)

What a surprise

Wang Wanqing gupinggang primary school

Alas, I didn't expect that he hasn't changed his old habits since the fifth grade.

The poor student in our class has a strange problem: he can't criticize. When criticized, he will cry in class.

He entered the campus from the first year of high school and that's it. At that time, we didn't mind that there would be a transitional stage when we just left our parents and entered the school. Who knows, he cried from senior one to senior three. In the fourth grade, we were a little impatient. It was a labor class. As soon as the bell rang, the class suddenly became quiet, but he was shouting. In order to calm him down, Wang Rui, the teacher's assistant, had a brainwave and put him on the criticism list. He had just written the word "ha" when suddenly, "wow-",he opened his mouth again and began to cry. No one can stop him. Wang Rui erased his name. "Ha, trouble!" I thought to myself. The teacher was still laughing when he came, so he naturally went to the criticism column. "Wow-wow-"There was a silence for a while, and then the voice came again. I thought, "I'm bored, he is not as good as this class!"

In the fifth grade, I thought he could get rid of his old habits, but when he was criticized in class, tears fell and he cried again. ...

"alas!" "Hey, it's all fifth grade, and I haven't changed yet." The whole class suddenly complained.

At this moment, I am thinking: when will he change if he doesn't change in grade five or six? Do we have to spend our primary school time in his crying? Does he have to cry all his life?

Alas, I can't believe that in the fifth grade, he still can't change his old habit of crying.

Comment: I can't believe that fifth-grade students still cry so much! Because the little author pays attention to life and observes carefully, he describes Hacheng's movements and demeanor when he answers crying very concretely and vividly.

(Instructor: Qian Yunning)

Unforgettable things

Chibi Road Primary School Jiang

I still remember that incident, and I learned something from it.

It was an afternoon in the second grade. I hummed a song with my schoolbag on my back and ran home excitedly. As soon as I got to my door, I smelled the smell and frowned. Later, when I entered the door, I saw my mother killing crucian carp! "Oh, I can drink delicious fish soup again." The thought of it makes my mouth water. Suddenly I thought, "Didn't my dad teach me the key points of killing fish?" I wonder if I can shine here? After thinking about it, I couldn't wait to break into the kitchen, grabbed the knife from my mother and said, "I'll take care of this task!" " "My mother was very happy, saying that I grew up and had the ability, and then she left happily.

I started killing fish. First, I must scrape the scales off the crucian carp with a knife. Alas, it's really hard to shave them. I, the first time to kill fish, encountered some problems. When scraping the scale, my hands are shaking and I don't listen to orders. I shave like a dog, and there is no order at all. It was a lot of trouble, and I finally scraped the scales clean with great effort. Next, you have to cut open the belly of the fish, which is even more difficult. The fish may know that he is in trouble and his death is coming, so he struggled desperately and splashed water all over my head and face. This made me very angry, gnashing my teeth and pointing at it, I said, "you damn little thing, I won't stop until I kill you!" " After that, I started a "mermaid war" with crucian carp. I stabbed it with a knife, but this guy was so cunning that he escaped my "attack" every time. Oh, yes, and spraying water with your mouth blinded me. In the face of "failure", I began to calm down and recall the main points of killing fish. Suddenly, my eyes lit up: didn't dad say that when killing fish, first hold the fish's gills and then kill them? By the way, I will ... use my father's way to make a sudden move. Ha, this trick really works, and the crucian carp can't be distracted anymore! I am ecstatic. I cut the belly of the fish with scissors and took out the internal organs. ...

My mother praised my "contribution" and made me understand that nothing can be done easily. Only by perseverance and perseverance can we taste the joy of success!

Comments: The sentences in the article are lively and interesting, and the vocabulary is also very rich.

(Instructor: Jiang Yongjun)

gift

Fuyu Zhujiang rd primary school

In the fourth grade, the summer vacation is coming, and several small net bugs in the class are talking about Daewoo's new work "Sky Mark", but because of the high price, some people are very few.

One day, I went home and said to my mother, "Mom, I want to buy a set of' Seal of Heaven', can I?" Mom said, "No, Sky Mark costs more than 100 yuan, which is too expensive!" I begged my mother to say, "Mom, all my classmates have' the mark of heaven', so if the whole class plays, will you be generous?" If you can't, you can't. Nothing can be said. Mother's eyes were fierce and her face was livid. I was stunned. After a while, I said, "well, forget it." Forget it if you don't buy it. It doesn't matter. Then I'm leaving. " I've never seen my mother like this. I haven't spoken to her all afternoon.

The results of the final exam have come down. I am Chinese 99, math 100, and I am happy to go home with the first certificate in my grade. I really hope my mother will change her mind after reading my grades. Mom said, "What's wrong with me? What's wrong with Chinese? I just got 99. That's ridiculous. Obviously it should not be wrong! " ……"

After listening to my mother's words, I completely gave up the idea of buying Tianhen. "No hope" is a fact I don't want to see.

The next day, there was a small gift box on the dining table, which read "For Fu Yu." I can't wait to open it. "Yeah, oh, hooray, aha ..." I'm so happy. Is the only one in the class worth more than 300 yuan. Touch it, there is a card below, "Give it to my good son who is the first in the whole grade!" " This is from my mother, yeah! ! "I really can't describe how I felt at that time. I think my mother must be very happy to hear my cheers.

What a surprise! What a surprise! But great!

Comments: The article is very touching and the sentences are fluent.

(Instructor: Jiang Yongjun)

What a surprise

Xiaoying Primary School Griffith

The squadron leader of our class and the captain of our school-Cheng Ao. He won a prize in the district for writing Chinese calligraphy, and he played the erhu so well that he had nothing to say. He is rich in Chinese knowledge, good at writing and flexible in mind, and mathematics examination is his specialty. However, the fly in the ointment is that his sports performance is a "red light", otherwise, he must be a "all-rounder".

The students in our class take sports lightly and happily, and Chinese, mathematics and foreign languages painfully. But Cheng Ao, on the other hand, is smiling in three main courses, but physical education class can kill him.

First of all, this is inseparable from his physical condition. Let's look at his "respect". I see that he has a fat head and big ears. No wonder he studies well. It turns out that he has a big head. The most striking thing is the hill-like "general's belly", which is broad and elastic. He has short limbs and fingers as thin as branches. He can crush a walnut easily.

Second, he can eat especially. I usually only eat one bowl, and Cheng Ao eats two or three bowls. Plus, he eats more and moves less, which naturally makes him fat.

Summer vacation is coming, Cheng Ao said to me: "Liu Erbing, when the summer vacation is over, my weight loss plan will be successful. I must run faster than you!" I am a "runner" in the whole grade, and I am good at running, so I proudly said to him, "If you want to surpass me, dream on!" Cheng Ao said nothing.

A summer vacation passed quickly. On the first day of school, I met Cheng Ao. I can't believe my eyes. He became thinner, but stronger. His weight loss plan succeeded! I was shocked, but I came to my senses and thought: although he lost weight successfully, he certainly can't outrun me. After all, do I have the strength? But I have a lingering fear.

It's time for the sports meeting. My event is sprint, and so is Cheng Ao. Wow! This guy is really ambitious! Really want to hit me! I can't lose, so I practice harder.

Finally, the day of sprint competition came. I am on the same starting line with Cheng Ao. I said to Cheng Ao, "You are desperate! You can't surpass me! " "Not necessarily, who laughs last, speaks with strength!" Hearing the whistle, we rushed to the finish line like arrows. At first, I was far ahead, but I was overtaken by Cheng Aochao because of lack of stamina. The champion fought here, and Cheng Ao and I tried our best to rush to the finish line.

Competition result: Cheng Ao beat me by 1 sec. Is it true?/You don't say. /You don't say. I really can't believe it.

"Nothing is difficult in the world, if you put your mind to it". No one knows how much sweat Cheng Ao paid to win that precious championship.

Comments: The article describes Cheng Ao's appearance very well, paving the way for the following "unexpected", with fluent sentences and specific contents.

(Instructor: Jiang Yongjun)

Give one's seat (to sb).

Lei Hu ma tai Jie primary school

The fiery red sun shines on the earth. "The air-conditioned car is coming!" People crowded into cars and I was no exception. I managed to grab a seat. At this moment, a woman with a baby got on the bus. The woman got on the bus and stood unsteadily not far from me.

The car braked suddenly and the woman almost fell down. I thought: let her! But the road behind is so far, how tired it is without a seat! Besides, with so many people sitting here, why should I be such a good person? With this in mind, I sat in my seat with a clear conscience. There is an uncle in military uniform in front. It seems that he wants to let him go several times, but he has to stand up and sit down several times.

At this time, the woman was afraid that wobbling would be bad for her children, so she said to the "fake good man" in front, "Would you please give me your seat?" The whole car is looking here. The "fake good guy" finally stood up. At this time, we can see clearly that this "fake good man" is a disabled person. I don't know if his left leg was broken or pierced by a bullet. It's not stable at all. The whole car looked at him approvingly.

The woman with the child in her arms blushed at once, and mine was red, as red as an apple. The woman said shyly, "Excuse me, please sit down!" " I'll get off at once! "The disabled uncle grabbed the woman and said," As a soldier, you should serve the people wholeheartedly! Giving is happier than giving! "Say that finish, he limped out of his seat.

My mother seems to be stuck in something. I can't bear it any longer. I plucked up my courage and said, "Uncle, I'm almost there. Please sit down! " Uncle said, "I won't sit!" " "I just pulled him down, and the blockage in my heart was gone. As sweet as honey.

Now, I really know what giving happiness is. His face has been deeply imprinted on my mind: a pair of big eyes, thick eyebrows and a high nose. ...

Comments: the movements, expressions and inner activities of the characters are well described! The selection of materials is also very good!

(Instructor: Jiang Yongjun)

Take the wrong bus.

Chahar rd primary school Han

I remember one Sunday in the fourth grade, my mother and I went to Hunan Road and took the No.3 bus to have a Go class. This is, an No.8 coach came, and just one person blocked the "8" by half and turned it into a "3". I asked my mother for a dollar and got on the bus quickly. My mother is still putting her purse, and the door is closed. At this time, two No.3 buses came again. My mother thought I caught the first one, so she went after the second one.

Take the No.8 bus to Erqiao Park, the bottom station, and find that I took the wrong bus and came to a strange place. I am distracted at this time, and my heart is like a pile of scattered beads. I was so anxious that my mind went blank that I came up with the stupidest and stupidest way-walking home. I cried as I walked. The hot sun made me sweat. This place is so remote that I am the only one. A lot of water has flowed into my mouth, and I don't know whether it is sweat or tears.

Besides, my mom didn't look for me, so she asked my dad to look for me. My father, President Tang and my classmates' parents came to see me by bus No.8, No.3 and No.22 respectively. I walked in tears and walked seven stops in one breath. Dad took the No.8 bus all the way to He Yan Road. Suddenly he found me and got off to pick me up. When I met my father, it was like I saw the savior. I am both happy and ashamed.

Taking the wrong bus this time was a very profound lesson for me. Through this incident, I understand that when taking the bus, don't run around and follow the adults to avoid making similar mistakes.

Comments: clear organization, relevant materials, true feelings and good center!

(Instructor: Teacher Lu)

Second vote

Sanpailou Primary School Zhu Keren

What a surprise! It's amazing that my friend stopped helping me.

I was very excited to choose a captain in my class once, because I had a high popularity index in my class and many natural friends, so all the boys or girls who voted for me would like me very much.

The voting was held at the class meeting on Wednesday afternoon. The class was 5 1 person, and I got 39 votes. The other two female contestants, one got 25 votes and the other got 37 votes. I am very happy, I know, this time I will be a cadre of the brigade. I say this because if the teacher is fooled by one of the two girls, it may cause public outrage. Now I am very popular. This is the so-called "win the hearts of the people and win the world." All smiles on the way after school, I can't wait to take such a big happy event home and have a good time with my family.

However, the next day, I was not happy. Some girls actually reported that someone voted for me more! The class teacher talked to me, and I immediately agreed to vote again. I thought to myself, "I have so many people voting for me anyway, what's terrible?" I am' a straight body is not afraid of a crooked shadow' ". Once again, the voting began. I leaned back in my chair and quietly thought about how to celebrate my victory again, but I almost fell off my chair. I only got 18 votes! I wonder why my friends don't help me. After class, I went to ask them, but to my surprise, almost all of them said they changed their minds involuntarily at that moment. I had to say to them with a wry smile, "It seems that you still don't trust me enough!"

From then on, I knew my friend would let you come. "What a surprise."

Comments: the material is pertinent, the emotion is true, and the language expression is humorous!

(Instructor: Teacher Lu)

pass

Beijing east road primary school Chen

On my small bookshelf, there is a book called New Phonetic Idiom Story. Seeing it, I can't help but think of an incident that happened in my second grade.

At that time, we