Purpose of evaluation:

1, through recalling, commenting and summarizing, to further improve students' language expression ability.

2. Train students' writing ability in the examination room, enhance their innovation ability and strive for development. Focus of comments.

How to make the article more profound and literary?

Annotation method

Summarized the self-evaluation, mutual evaluation and teacher-student cooperation.

Annotation step

First, explain the content of the evaluation. Topic composition "The Joy of Reading"

Second, show the college entrance examination composition scoring standard. The requirements of composition examination are divided into two levels: foundation and development.

1, basic level

(1) in line with the meaning of the question

② Meet the stylistic requirements.

(3) Healthy thinking and sincere feelings.

④ The center is clear and the content is substantial.

⑤ The structure is complete and the language is fluent.

⑥ Standard writing and correct punctuation.

2. Development level

(1) Go deep into the phenomenon and reveal the cause of the problem. The viewpoint is instructive.

② Rich materials, full images and profound artistic conception.

③ Vivid words, flexible sentences, good use of rhetoric and meaningful sentences.

There are innovative ideas, fresh materials, ingenious ideas and unique reasoning and imagination.

Third, students evaluate each other's compositions. (Show students' compositions)

Composition No.65438 +0: There are hundreds of beauties and millions of reds in the world, and I love reading alone.

I'm always a loner. I don't like greetings when I see you, and I don't know how to please people. Most of the time, I stayed alone in my room, picked up a book and rummaged through it to relieve loneliness. Over time, reading has become my favorite.

Writers are good at precipitating love and hate in the world with their keen fingertips, so I really hope that I can use a vicissitudes to feel the joys and sorrows between paper and enjoy the happiness brought by reading.

Reading is an encounter through time and space. We went boating in the sea of books, and we came to the Chibi battlefield where rocks were flying, looking up at Zhou Yu, who was "heroic and dashing"; We were drunk in the suburbs of Yang Liuan Breeze and the Remnant Moon in late autumn, and felt the parting of "holding hands and looking at each other with tears"; We boarded the boat by Xunyang River, listening to our unhappy conversation at the end of the sky. We can't help but admire Qu Yuan, who is knowledgeable, ambitious, upright and noble. When we saw the "haggard" old man walking towards the Miluo River, we felt extremely sad.

When we are immersed in the joy of reading and beat our hearts with words, all earthly troubles will be thrown outside the cloud nine. Entering the world of books, we will listen to the sound of flowers, touch the traces of years, pay homage to the face of history and feel the cycle of life.

Annie Baby said: As long as we read in the same posture, we can comfort each other. It is a great pleasure to let the same soul sing. When our soul is occupied by competition, filled with material desires and paralyzed by alcohol, what can we use to resist the repression of roaring in life and get real happiness? Please don't forget our loyal friend-book.

For me, reading has become a state of existence. When I have money, I will buy books first, and the rest will buy food and clothes.

Under the orange lamp, with a book in hand, you can swim in the sea of books and feel comfortable. Half of the moon, the trees are shaking, and the breeze is Xu Lai. What an honor.

Pray for God to see my sincerity in reading and let books accompany me through the ups and downs of life.

Op. 2: set foot on the promised land

In this unconventional modern life, people have fun in different ways. People can easily click the mouse and enjoy the fun brought by the Internet. But few people study poetry collections; People can pay attention to the rise and fall of stocks all the time, but they don't want to read Tang poetry and Song poetry. When people have troubles, they would rather go to discos to vent their anger than settle down and read literary classics. They have alienated the paradise that allows them to return to nature-books.

When Kissinger no longer served as US Secretary of State, he once said, "The greatest happiness after leaving office is that you can read your favorite books instead of reading documents all day." This shows how charming reading is.

Yes, think about it. What's more pleasant in your spare time than turning over a few pages of your favorite books with a cup of fruit drink in your hand? Reading is an effective way to enrich life and an important content to improve the quality of life. It can calm you down and reflect on your clear mind. In this paradise, you can wander around and enjoy yourself at will, and then you will find it a great pleasure. Your body and mind will be completely relaxed and happy.

With a good book, you will no longer be lonely. As the saying goes, there is a book in your hand that allows you to wander around the world. Talking with those great hearts and communicating with all things in nature is the best enjoyment in the world. When you set foot on this book, you can freely shuttle through the delicate and touching world, read colorful languages and characters, appreciate people with the flavor of the times, and understand the real and chaotic social entanglements. ................................................................

As middle school students, we don't have to force ourselves to stride forward on the road of literature. As long as we can step into the grassland of literature under the guidance of books, we have already gained great happiness. You can appreciate Lu Xun's profundity, Zhang Ailing's beauty, Yu's erudition, the warmth and sweetness you can feel, the humor and ridicule of Fortress Besieged, and the profoundness of A Dream of Red Mansions. You can find almost all the answers you want from books, won't you be happy?

In short, whether you are interested or not, as long as you set foot on the book, you will find the happiness you want.

Composition 3: The Happiness of Reading

Reading gives people happiness, brilliance and talent. bacon

An ancient Greek philosopher once said, "We should not pursue all kinds of happiness, but only noble happiness." The pleasure of reading is a noble pleasure.

The pleasure of reading is special. It has rich and profound connotations. It nourishes our nutrients and is the booster of our progress. From our enlightenment to our gradual understanding, it is reading that takes us out of that ignorant saline-alkali land and begins to taste the taste of life: ups and downs, joys and sorrows. It can be said that every successful person grows up in reading, learns in the process of growing up, and finally succeeds. This kind of happiness of success is hard to appreciate unless you are a scholar.

In order to prove Goldbach's conjecture, Chen Jingrun, a famous mathematician, went to the library every day and was immersed in books, almost to the point of forgetting himself. He never felt tired, but felt infinite happiness, because books gave him fun, talent and happiness, and finally he won the "pearl in the crown of mathematics"; Dr. Sun Yat-sen loves reading. He said that he couldn't live without reading for a day, because reading gave him spiritual support and gave him revolutionary motivation. Through reading, he tasted endless happiness.

However, the happiness of reading is hard to come by. Happiness depends on what kind of books you read. Goethe once said, "Reading a good book means talking with many noble people." A good book lets us know how to be a man and how to enrich our lives. A bad book, like a bad friend, will lead us astray. It gives you a temporary "stimulus", but it always affects your thoughts and even pushes you to the cliff of life.

We yearn for noble happiness, which requires us not only to be diligent, hardworking, knowledgeable and suspicious, but also to have noble hobbies. Only in this way can we "study for happiness". Because we read good books, we can appreciate Paul? Kochakin's perception of life; I feel Lu You's love for the motherland and understand Marx's interpretation of scientific materialism. These will always remind us to strive for our ideals and guide us to achieve noble happiness.

Whether life is brilliant or dim, whether the road is bumpy or smooth, as long as there are good books, life is happy.

The fourth composition: there is the true meaning that you want to distinguish but forget to say (argumentative)

-Talking about the fun of reading.

There are many kinds of happiness. For scholars, happiness is nothing more than reading.

It is books that lead us into the unknown world, and reading tasteful books is to improve ourselves. After reading Ditan and Me, we, together with the famous modern writer Shi Tiesheng, realized the meaning of life, inspiring us to blaze a path of life with our own struggle. Reading The Most Beautiful Grave in the World, we appreciate Tolstoy's personality charm of advocating nature and pursuing simplicity together with Austrian writer Zweig. After reading Notre Dame de Paris, we discussed with the French writer Hugo what is true, good and beautiful, and what is false and ugly. Almost every book opens a window to understand the world in front of us. When we talk to the author of the text, communicate with the characters in the book, and achieve emotional recognition and thinking, it is really a supreme reading realm, and that kind of happiness is self-evident.

Reading Lu Xun's ridicule, Zhang Ailing's outstanding personality, Hu Shizhi's beauty, Li Ao's enchanting charm, and Qian Zhongshu's interesting and meaningful, these famous people have inspired us, constantly sublimated our personality, and let us experience the happiness of success on the road of life growth.

In life, I often meet some people who regard reading as a burden and even refuse to read. What a short-sighted behavior!

Yes, it's a bit bitter to study, otherwise, there will be a feeling that no one has asked for ten years. However, everything in the world is dialectical. Without freezing, how can plum blossoms smell sweet? Bitter before sweet, rich for thousands of years. Song Lian, the leader of the civil servants in Ming Dynasty, recalled his study experience in the preface to seeing Ma Sheng off to Yang, and wrote: In the cold winter, he braved the heavy snow and went to study hundreds of miles away, eating only two meals a day, and his clothes were ragged. "I don't know if his mouth and body are not like people, but he enjoys it." Imagine if Song Lian didn't study hard and study hard. How can I feel the joy of reading?

Of course, not all books can make you happy. Reading a book you don't like is like watching a play with a slate on your back in the theater. Reading harmful books can only pollute your soul. Facing the highly developed network today, we should have the ability to distinguish between fragrant flowers and poisonous weeds and learn to read, not only to get books, but also to get books. Read more tasteful books and constantly enrich yourself, as the great poet Su Shi said:

Speak in groups, comment on the four essays sent to you, and grade them according to the composition grading requirements of the college entrance examination (for example, the basic score plus development score is 45+8=53, the basic score is less than 45, there is no development score, and there is no topic, 2 points will be deducted, and every 50 words will be deducted 1 point, and every misspelled word will be deducted 1 point). Finally, I choose my favorite composition.

Student A: I think this composition is quite successful. Among these compositions, my favorite composition is no. 1, with cultural background, fluent language and profound meaning. I think this composition should be 50 points (basic level 45+5=50).

Student B: My favorite composition is none. 1 and 2, the first one first. The title is "There are hundreds of beauties in the world, I love you alone", and the words are flexible and beautiful. Secondly, from the text point of view, the author's personality is the same as mine, and he also likes to sit alone under the lamp and hold a book in the dead of night. When I read this composition, I can make a sound. So I gave composition No.65438 +0 47+5 = 52, and composition No.4 was written according to the classic routine of argumentative writing. It's well written, and the discussion is like a torrent of water, which is indisputable. I think the marking teacher will be impressed, so I gave this composition 50+4=54.

Student C: It really envies me to see that all the students' compositions are so good. 1 has a gorgeous and classic language, No.2 is light and pleasant, No.3 is realistic and close to students' life, and No.4 is smooth and colorful. I also have a suggestion. In the last paragraph ofNo. 1, it is better to change "request" to "entreat".

Teacher: This classmate's speech is very good, pointing out both advantages and disadvantages. This is a very responsible attitude. Now we are divided into two groups, men and women. Let's discuss and grade these compositions collectively, and then push someone to announce everyone's scores on the blackboard.

Representative of boys, Composition No.65438 +0: 50+5 = 55 Composition No.2: 45+2 = 47 Composition No.3: 47+2 = 49 Composition No.4: 48+8=56

Female student representative, compositionNo.1:50+4 = No.54 2: 45+3 = No.48 3: 47+2 = No.49 4: 50+4 = 54.

The teacher announced the scores of these compositions:

Combination number 1: 45+2=47

Composition No.2: 47+7=54

Composition No.3: 45+5=50

Composition No.4: 47+3=50

The teacher thinks that Composition No.2 is an excellent composition with complete structure, fluent language expression and modern flavor. For example, the use of words such as "mouse" and "disco" and the comprehensive use of various argumentation techniques make it full and full. It is generally believed that the composition 1 is the best, but the language is richer and higher than other compositions. However, the teacher thinks that the beginning and end of this composition failed to highlight the happiness of reading, and only wrote about loving reading.

Fourth, uncover the mystery and announce the author of the selected article.

Liang Yue, author of composition 1,

No.2 composition author Liu Wenwen

No.3 composition author Bai Xue

The author of the fourth composition is the teacher himself.

The teacher interviewed on the spot. Excuse me, author No.2, how did you conceive this article?

Student A: If I write this composition well, I think I owe Mr. Zhang a word: use other people's wisdom to light up my own article. He gave me some inspiration and help. Therefore, I chose famous aphorisms and some wonderful sentences in the material selection and language expression of the article, which may be a highlight of the composition.

On the topic of reading happiness, my first thought is that in modern society, people often ignore the elegant way of "reading", so I take this as a starting point, compare books to heaven, then quote Kissinger's words to explain the happiness of reading, and finally contact the reality of middle school students to inspire everyone to set foot on this paradise to find elegance and happiness.

Through this composition training, I realize that "illuminating my own composition with the wisdom of others" is indeed a good way for our composition to achieve profound and literary development, but we should also pay attention to its proper use.

The teacher talks about the experience of composition: I think students usually feel that there is nothing to say when writing a composition, so I try to find material from the text in this exercise and give students a demonstration. The beginning is a comprehensive summary of the case, and then a typical example, the familiar Song Lian case, is concrete and profound. At the same time, it is necessary to correct students' understanding of examples in their compositions, so as to link materials with viewpoints. So I used a series of parallelism and went on to say.

Fifth, summarize the gains and losses of this composition.

Success:

1, with cultural information and rich connotation-"Walking in the sky and clouds * * *." "With books, you will never sigh." Roman? Roland's words profoundly revealed the important influence of books on us. If you want to be happy, read books, because it stimulates your active thinking, enriches your life, and allows you to enjoy the endless happiness it brings while gaining knowledge. What a happy thing! (Ji Heng)

If you exchange apples with each other, you still get an apple, so reading some beautiful words when you are happy is like sharing happiness with friends, and you get two happiness. (Yu Fan)

2, language expression, momentum through-"How the Yellow River water moved out of the sky".

Because of reading, I know that Li Bai is broad-minded and elegant, and I know that he is heroic and free and easy. "Spin a thousand pieces of silver and come back!" ; Because of reading, I felt the depression and depression of Du Fu's "petals have fallen like tears there, and lonely birds have sung their sorrows"; Because of reading, I appreciate Li Qingzhao's graceful sadness that "the rain cleared up last night and the wind blew suddenly". (Zhu Hong)

3, literary talent, many highlights-the smiling back is charming.

4. Books are the starting point and the end point of my happiness. Here, I can put all my troubles and unhappiness behind me. Here, my life has become full and I am eager to do everything well; Here, I found the source of the light of wisdom; Here, I understand myself, others and life. (Hu Lili)

Disadvantages:

1, style tendency is unknown-like fog, rain and wind. The topic composition is not limited to style, and the style tendency is unknown. Of course, it is not literature and art..

A classmate's composition begins: "I remember when I was a child, I always pestered my mother with fairy tales to tell stories." When I grew up, I learned to read picture books and fantasized about making friends with Snow White and the seven dwarfs all day. " I didn't write a narrative.

2, the exam is not allowed, off topic-"Chaofa Baidicheng" and "Mutou Shihao Village" didn't take care of it before and after, and the context was interrupted. A classmate wrote in the second section of the composition: "Reading can make us gain more knowledge, but books, like friends, must be carefully chosen. Good books can benefit you a lot, and bad books may lead you astray. "

3, the meaning is not clear enough-in fact, I don't understand your heart.

A classmate wrote at the beginning of the composition: "I read, but I am not happy;" I am happy, not because of reading. "A classmate wrote at the end of the composition:" Reading is not necessarily happy, but what is happier than reading? "This is equivalent to telling the teacher that I am not writing about the happiness of reading. Didn't you deliberately target the teacher?

Seventh, write a composition next week; Rewriting the pleasure of reading requires that you must write an argumentative essay next time you write a narrative.

Eight. Conclusion:

It is difficult to reach the development level of college entrance examination composition. However, as long as we work hard, the article can be written better. "Practice a thousand songs to know your friend, and watch a thousand swords to know your device." However, it is not through one or two trainings and only a few rhetorical devices that you can write a very emotional and literary text. Behind the language, we need a profound literary foundation, a broad spiritual realm and a unique aesthetic taste.

Reflection after teaching:

Composition teaching and evaluation should be targeted, instructive and enlightening. Based on this guiding ideology, I wrote a model essay for the common problems in students' compositions and put it in students' compositions for comments. I didn't tell the students in advance, because I wanted to participate equally with the students, and I didn't let the students write papers for different people, so I adopted the practice of publishing the author after everyone commented, which proved to be effective.

/kloc-more than 0/00 people attended the lecture, including school leaders and famous special-grade teachers. Everyone responded well, especially the students' speeches won unanimous praise from the participants. Ji Degui, a special teacher and a young and middle-aged expert who enjoys special government allowance, spoke highly of this composition lecture. He said that the students' speeches were wonderful, the teachers' evaluations were wonderful and the classroom effect was good.

The author believes that the success of this course is manifested in the implementation of three problems: first, it solves a common problem in students' compositions, that is, it is difficult for students to choose materials for their compositions, guide students to find materials from texts, and tell them how to unify materials and viewpoints; The second is to highlight a key point, that is, how to make the college entrance examination composition have profound literariness? Proper use of rhetorical devices and comprehensive use of various sentence patterns can improve the expression effect. Thirdly, to clarify the understanding, some students think that using parallelism or metaphor can get development scores, which is wrong. It is often overlooked that 45 points can be added to the development score for the basic composition.

Practice has proved that co-writing between teachers and students helps to stimulate students' enthusiasm for writing, which is a practical teaching method.