Modify:
Every African's daily life is also colorful.
Methods of modifying sentences:
Improve a sentence
Types of ill sentences: improper word order, improper collocation, incomplete components and redundant words.
1. Common types of ill sentences
(1) Incorrect word order
(2) Improper collocation
(3) Incomplete ingredients
(4) word redundancy.
Other ill sentences include misuse of related words, inconsistency, wrong sentences, ambiguous sentences and so on.
2. The basic methods of distinguishing and modifying ill sentences
Discrimination of (1)
A. Language sense method
B. Tightening laws
C. decomposition method
D. focusing method
(2) modification
The methods of modifying sick sentences include adding, deleting, adjusting and modifying, that is, adding words, deleting redundant words, adjusting word order and changing words. No matter which method is adopted, two principles should be followed in modifying sick sentences; One is to keep the basic meaning of the original sentence unchanged; Second, the fewer changes, the better, and no new language diseases can appear in the revision.
Eight Points for Attention in Modifying Two Ill Sentences
1. Pay attention to the collocation of related words.
Example 1: Imagination is not necessary for the poet's creation, but also for the reader's appreciation.
Exodus 2: All cadres and the masses, without exception, must abide by the socialist legal system.
Analysis:
Example 1 is a compound sentence with progressive relationship. If "not only but also" is used and "not" is matched with "but", the example is wrong.
Example 2 "No matter" is an unconditional related word, which can't be followed by a coordinate phrase, but only a choice phrase. In the example, "and" should be "or"
2. Pay attention to the sentences with the words "prohibition" and "prevention".
Some words, such as "prohibition", "prevention", "taboo" and "avoidance", have their own meaning of "trying to stop". Advisors often add negative words, resulting in opposite meanings in sentences and language barriers. When doing a problem, we should first examine the meaning of the problem, find out whether the original intention is to promote or prevent it, and then determine whether the negative words will stay or not.
In order to prevent the SARS epidemic from rebounding, the city leaders asked all units to further strengthen management and formulate strict preventive measures. (Senior High School Entrance Examination in Haidian District, Beijing in 2003)
Analysis: The original meaning of the example is "to stop the rebound of SARS". If negative words are added, "stop" and "no longer" will form a double negative, indicating affirmation, which is just the opposite of the original intention and becomes a speech barrier. "No" should be removed.
Pay attention when there are multiple negative words in a sentence.
With the development of science today, no one will deny that the earth does not revolve around the sun.
Analysis: "No one will deny …" Double negation expresses positive meaning, followed by negative word "not …", and finally expresses negative meaning. (Triple negation is negation. ) The word "no" should be removed.
4. Pay attention to prepositions in sentences.
In the use of prepositions, language barriers are easy to appear. This kind of sentence often consists of two parts, one is the adverbial of prepositional phrase, and the other is the normal sentence backbone. Proposers often set traps here and add prepositions to both parts, which makes the subject of the sentence hidden and causes language diseases with incomplete components. When reviewing, you will often find that you can delete both prepositions. At this time, you should pay attention to reading sentences, especially sentences with context, accurately grasp the real subject of sentences, and then delete redundant prepositions.
Example: Through three years' study in junior high school, I have mastered a lot of knowledge and learned a lot about being a man. (Examination questions in Zhanjiang, Guangdong Province in 2004)
Analysis: The prepositions "through ..." and "make ..." and the following phrases form an object-object phrase, which makes the original subject become an adverbial and the whole sentence has no subject. One of the prepositions should be removed.
5. Pay attention to the collocation and word order of coordinate phrases.
This kind of sentences often have coordinate phrases as predicate or object, and the proposer often sets inappropriate collocation or word order. When verb coordinate phrases are used as predicates, we should pay attention to whether the word order is logical; In addition, pay attention to whether it can be matched with the head word before or after.
Example 1: We should solve and discover the problems in learning in time. (2004 Changsha senior high school entrance examination questions)
Example 2: The students watched and listened to the brave hero's report with reverence.
Analysis: It is illogical to "solve" and then "find" in the sentence 1, which belongs to improper word order. It should be changed to "find and solve in time".
In the coordinate phrase "look and listen", "listen" can be collocated with "report", but "look" and "listen" can't be collocated, and the sentence is improperly collocated.
6. Pay attention to the sentences about the increase or decrease of quantity.
Numerals can be divided into exact numbers and divisors, so we should master the rules of their use: you can't add words such as "least", "most", "highest", "exceeding" and "lowest" before divisors; When using words such as "reduce", "reduce" and "shrink", you can't use multiples, otherwise there will be contradictions. If we master these laws at ordinary times, we can avoid the trap of proposer. In addition, we should pay attention to repetitive language diseases.
During the period of 1: 10, the number of books published each year more than doubled, while the total print run remained basically unchanged, indicating that the average number of books more than doubled.
In the past 200 years, about one third of the forests on the earth have been cut down and destroyed. (Examination questions of Guangdong senior high school entrance examination in 2004)
Analysis: Example 1 When using words such as "decrease", "decrease" and "decrease", you can't use multiples, but use fractions or percentages instead.
Example 2 "about" and "about" both indicate uncertainty, and they are repeated, so one of them should be deleted.
Pay attention to the collocation of sentences with words such as "can" and "whether".
Be careful if there are words such as "whether", "whether", "good or bad" and "whether" in the sentence. This sentence may be guilty of improper collocation. Because these words put forward two situations, indicating double mention, most of them should be followed from two aspects, so as to match. However, proposers often set up language barriers here, some of which are followed by words such as "can" and "can't" indicating single commitment, and some are followed by words indicating double commitment, which leads to inconsistent logical errors.
Example 1: Whether the content is correct or not is an important criterion to measure a work.
Exodus 2: Doing a good job in production and disaster relief depends on whether the style of cadres is in-depth.
Analysis: For example 1, the word "whether the content is correct" in front of it means double mentioning, but the corresponding word behind it is single undertaking, which is inconsistent and leads to language confusion. You can add "advantages and disadvantages" after "works" and delete "one".
Example 2 "well done" is a single mention, "in-depth" is a double mention, which is inconsistent. "Well done" should be preceded by "can".
Pay attention to the emotional color of words in sentences.
Some sentences do not have the above pathological features, and there is no wrong language in grammar. At this time, we should pay attention to the emotional color of idioms or words in sentences, and whether the positive and negative meanings of this sentence match the emotional color of the words used.
: Exodus His earnest and diligent study spirit is worth learning from each of our classmates.
Analysis: "effective" means "not learning well", which is derogatory. It's not appropriate to use it here. It should be changed to "learning".
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