Action description composition 1 catching crickets
I crept to find it. Suddenly, something jumped, got into the crack in the brick by the wall and continued to scream. I quickly turned on the flashlight, ah! What a big cricket! Look at it, its two tentacles are slightly shaking, its two hind legs are strong and powerful, and its little belly flickers when it barks, as if it is trying hard. As soon as I got close, it jumped into the nearby pile of broken bricks. I gently pulled the brick away, folded my hands into a trumpet shape, and slowly bent down, thinking, you can't run away now. Who knows that a robot didn't jump, and cricket jumped to the wall with his hand. I also approached the wall, and cricket seemed to know that I was catching it, so I simply turned and fled into a small hole and never came out.
I waited anxiously, but nothing happened. Alas, how can we catch it? Suddenly, I used my quick wits and shouted to the room, "Little brother! Bring a glass of water! " Looking back, I don't know when I was already squatting beside him. He got up quickly and ran to the house. I carefully poured the water into the hole, which was amazing. I saw the cricket soaking wet and suddenly jumped out of my sight. Just before it stood firm, I took a good look and finally caught it with a jump. The little thing was still kicking around in my palm, and I was busy putting it in the glass bottle. At this point, don't say my joy! I think it's really not easy to catch you! You have to use your head.
Under the lamp, I held up the bottle and looked at it carefully. Cricket stood up with two wings, two tentacles and two hind legs, staring at me as if to have a big fight with me! I said to myself, "Good boy, when I catch your other partner, you will have the strength to compete with it!" " "The little brother next to me looked at me curiously, and we couldn't help hugging and laughing.
[Comment] The little author of this article vividly described the process and fun of catching crickets. This shows that he usually pays attention to observing life and has a comprehensive observation and profound experience in the process of catching crickets: discovery-search-intelligent capture-fun. Only in this way can we grasp the characteristic plot and describe it in detail.
This afternoon, our school held a New Year's Day garden activity. I'm so happy that the long-awaited day has finally come.
In the afternoon, I came to school happily. I ran into the classroom and saw that it was brand new. The classroom is covered with ribbons, and many colorful balloons are hung on the wall.
After a while, the garden activities began. The first activity is for fun. Look, the students are carrying two buckets of water, swaying on the upturned bridge and curved building blocks ... Looking at that thrilling look, my heart is almost in my throat. Ah! It's my turn The bucket is so heavy, it's still two buckets. I am so thin that I have to carry two buckets of water. Isn't the mouse holding the elephant? I carried two buckets of water and began to walk up. I thought it would never fall, only lollipops. When I passed a seesaw wooden bridge, I thought: We must keep balance. Suddenly, one end of the seesaw fell, and I seemed to fall in mid-air, so I couldn't help screaming "Ah …". My legs are shaking all the time. The students all laughed when they saw it. "Yang Qiang, be brave and don't embarrass our female voice." My good friend encouraged me. Timid, I still fell three times. Then I waddled on the floor playing with building blocks. I stepped on the building blocks carefully, just like walking in a covered stone, fearing that I would fall into the water. Finally, I drilled a small hole, because I am small and exquisite, and I successfully drilled through the small hole ... Well, I finally got through five levels, beheaded six generals, and fell a stone in my heart. The students cheered for me.
We also carried out many interesting activities, such as: fun bowling, helping each other in the same boat, winning every shot … Today, we really had a good time!
Action description composition 3 will always be moved by something at that moment.
In that Wenchuan earthquake, many heroes emerged, but what I admire most is the eagle flying in the blue sky. Qiu Guanghua, a 5 1 year-old special pilot of an aviation regiment in the military region, and his comrades in the 734 unit performed very well in the Wenchuan earthquake. When an earthquake happens, their first reaction is to fight! Please fight again! The third minute after the earthquake, they organized a group to start the emergency plan; In the thirtieth minute, all helicopters entered the waiting state; In the first118th minute, two helicopters flew to the epicenter ... If so many relief materials were loaded and unloaded one minute earlier, they would arrive at the disaster area earlier. They race against time and take active actions. At that time, the terrain in Sichuan was very steep. They must fly close to the mountain peaks in the canyon, find the landing site by the narrow river, and bump in the strong airflow. However, they are not afraid.
Captain Qiu Guanghua played several times in a row. His mind is full of people suffering in the disaster area, and he has long forgotten fatigue. Under his leadership, other members of the crew also showed great courage and tenacity. Zhang Peng, a soldier, made an irresistible request at this special moment: Please invite the Party organization to visit me on the battlefield of earthquake relief! He shuttles between warehouses and helicopters, Chengdu and the hardest hit areas from morning till night every day, and he has completed 170 cargo handling tasks in ten days. When he paid the special membership dues in the group, he paid the only eighty yuan in his pocket as a non-party member membership dues. On the afternoon of May 3 1, the helicopter suffered a sudden change in weather on the way back, and the plane crashed unfortunately ... all the crew gave their precious lives.
I think people who exchange their lives and time for the happiness of others are touching and worthy of our respect.
I like sports. Exercise can make me energetic, quick-thinking, coordinated and healthy. Only with a healthy body can I study harder. In spring, I like running on the grass in the suburbs, swimming in the water in summer, climbing mountains in autumn and having snowball fights in the snow in winter. When the weather is good, I like skipping rope and riding a bike outside. When the weather is bad, I like dancing at home. I not only like sports myself, but also watch sports games, especially those in which the China team participates. Whenever I see our athletes win gold medals, raise the national flag and play the national anthem, I am as excited as the athletes. Of course, my main sport is fitness.
My father likes sports very much. He wants me to be an excellent tennis player or an excellent swimmer, but I know that my task now is to exercise well and study hard. Mom said that only by learning knowledge well can we exercise smarter, and having a healthy body can also promote the improvement of academic performance. They complement each other and everything can't be slack. I want to study hard and keep exercising. I also hope my classmates and friends can study and exercise with me.
Action description composition 5 change the light bulb
"The light bulb is broken, the light bulb is broken!" We shouted. He Laoshi heard that, carrying a tool bag and carrying a ladder upstairs. He came to the light, leaned the ladder against the wall, then went to the light switch and pulled the light rope. The light bulb didn't light up, so he pulled the light rope again. Then, he moved the ladder, held it firmly against the electric light, supported the ladder with both hands, and climbed it carefully. At the top, he raised his head, supported the ceiling with his right hand, and slowly twisted the light bulb with his left hand. After unscrewing the light bulb, he took out a new light bulb from his pocket and screwed it on. Then, he climbed down the ladder one by one. Go to the switch, pull the switch, and the light will come on, bright. We clapped our hands and shouted, "Oh, it's fixed! It's fixed! " He Laoshi looked at us and said with a smile, "You little sparrows will yell when to change the light bulb!"
[opinion] how to change the light bulb? This passage describes in great detail a series of actions of changing light bulbs: lifting, lifting, coming, releasing, walking, pulling, moving, helping, helping, climbing, lifting, twisting, pulling, looking and laughing. These more than ten verbs are used properly, describing the movements of hands, feet and eyes respectively.
When writing a composition, the teacher always asks us to write about a person's actions when doing something. Only by writing a person's actions truthfully can the characters be written alive. What the teacher said makes sense. Describing the actions of characters and writing how they did it is a way to show their spiritual quality. If we learn to describe the movements of characters in detail in our compositions, then the images of characters can be vividly displayed in front of readers.
So, how to write the actions of the characters? Do the following two things.
First, write a coherent action.
Describing a person's actions needs decomposition, that is, a person's actions are composed of a series of actions. Break a big action into several small moves, grasp the most characteristic movements of the characters and describe them one by one, then the whole article can write the movements of the characters concretely.
Please read the following composition fragment:
Fried dishes
Mother washed the cabbages piece by piece, piled them up piece by piece, held the vegetables in her left hand, picked up a knife in her right hand, cut them one by one, cut the cabbages into small squares, and put the remaining leaves aside.
Start cooking. Mother put the pot on the fire first, and then poured the oil into the pot when it was hot. After a while, oil smoke emerged from the pot and made a "sizzling" sound. Mother threw the chopped green onion into the pot first, and then poured the vegetables into the pot, grabbed the spatula and kept turning it over. When the dish slowly changed from white to Huang Shi, my mother poured in soy sauce and vinegar, sprinkled with salt, then turned it over with a shovel, sprinkled with sugar and monosodium glutamate, quickly took the pot down, stirred it a few times, and then took it out.
Sweet and sour cabbage and My Sweetie fried by my mother are sour and delicious, with unique taste. This is * *' s specialty!
How did Mom fire sweet and sour cabbage? The author decomposes mother's cooking actions, expresses coherent actions in words, and then describes the most representative actions of mother's cooking in detail. For example, first wash the vegetables and cut them into pieces, then start cooking in a pan, then put the vegetables in the pan, then pour in the seasoning, and then turn them over with a shovel. In this fragment composition, because of the use of words indicating the sequence and coherence of actions, the whole process of mother's cooking is clearly written, and the skillful way of mother's cooking is clearly displayed to readers, which left a deep impression on us.
Second, use words accurately.
The language of our motherland is very rich, for example, the words expressing actions are: take, carry, carry, push and so on. What words are used? It depends on the specific environment of the article. Therefore, when describing the characters' movements, we should use accurate words and carefully select verbs, and strive to write the characters' movements accurately, concretely and vividly, and the characters' movements and images vividly.
Please read the following composition fragment:
Wipe the glass
Although Sharla Cheung is short, she always cleans the cleanest cup! In order to see what tricks she has, I carefully observed her action of cleaning the glass. She quickly stepped on the chair, got on the table, and then walked from the table to the windowsill. She first dusted the glass with a dry cloth, then put on a wet rag, stood on tiptoe, grabbed the window lattice with one hand and wiped the glass with the rag from top to bottom with the other. Then, I wiped it from top to bottom and from left to right. Where there is a stain on the glass, she takes a breath and rubs it hard. It's still not clean. She dug it with her finger again. Ah, the stain was finally eliminated by her. She came down from the windowsill, stood on the ground, looked at her spotless glass and smiled happily. It turns out that she is really good at cleaning glass, so carefully!
This sketch used a series of words such as "stepping, stepping, dusting, stepping, scratching, wiping, ha, digging" when writing about Sharla Cheung's glass cleaning, and made the process of glass cleaning very specific. When we connect these words together, we will form a picture of Sharla Cheung cleaning the glass neatly in our mind, and we admire her for cleaning the glass spotlessly, quickly and well.
From this example, we know that the proper use of words expressing actions can enrich and concretize the content, vividly depict the characters, reproduce their ideological quality and avoid the emptiness of the content.
When describing character movements, we should also pay attention to the following points:
1. to show the character's quality.
We often say: "Action originates from thought", that is to say, the actions of characters should conform to their ideological quality. Everyone has different personalities, feelings and inner world. The description of characters' movements with typical significance can make the characters more vivid. When describing a character's actions, we should not only write what he is doing, but also describe how he does it. Through the action description of the characters, the character characteristics and mental outlook of the characters are expressed.
2. Write interspersed in the narrative.
The action description of characters is not isolated, but should be written in specific events. That is to say, in the narrative process, when it is necessary to express the characteristics or qualities of a certain aspect of the characters, a series of action descriptions can be carried out, and the characters can be displayed more vividly in front of the readers through typical and meticulous action descriptions.
3. Write clearly step by step
After carefully observing the movements of the characters, we should clearly write down the whole process of the characters' work, and write down every step of the characters' activities step by step, so that the characters' images are clear and the articles are coherent.