How to write the process concretely and vividly around one thing? What descriptive methods have we learned? Language description, action description, portrait description, expression description, psychological description, scenery description, 6? 1 example: moved? 6? 1 arel？ 6? 1 On Wednesday afternoon, I led my classmates to the playground. ? 6? 1 Although the vernal equinox has passed, the weather is still cold. Foggy and gloomy. Let you not notice the traces of spring at all. (Description of Scenery) Only children's frolicking and screaming are calling for the arrival of spring. They ran after each other on the playground, releasing all the energy they had accumulated for a winter. Those boys who love basketball, in twos and threes, started a shooting competition under the basketball stand. Even compared with professional basketball players, it is not inferior. (action description) (action description)? 6? 1 I walked and talked with some girls on the playground. Suddenly, I don't know who shouted: 6? Teacher, it's raining! ? 6? I looked up, really, I don't know when it began to rain. For the earth, for us, it is so beautiful, dense, so light and elegant. (landscape description)? 6? 1 I look at the time. It's time to gather. I called the whole team to eat in a hurry. ? 6? 1 Soon, the team stood up. When the number of people is counted, two are missing. ? 6? 1 At this moment, Ronaldinho stood up and said, "Teacher, Teddy boy and A Yang just ran to Xiangde Building. They probably went to the toilet. I'll rush them! " I promised, and he ran away. ? 6? 1 After a while, he came back. "Did you find it?" I asked immediately. ? 6? 1 "No" Ronaldinho answered with a suspicious face. ? 6? 1 "It's raining harder and harder. Let's go first and wait for them at the entrance of the building! " ? 6? 1 I looked everywhere while leading the students to the door of the restaurant. Where did these two go? (language description-)? 6? 1 Before walking to the entrance of the building, I saw A Fei and a man holding rain gear, and a man ran to the front of the team with some cotton-padded clothes: "Quick, whose clothes are on, don't freeze!" Teddy boy shouted like a little adult. (action, language)? 6? 1? It turns out that these two people went to the classroom to get coats and rain gear for their classmates! I watched them talk nonstop, and a strange feeling came to my mind. ? 6? A Fei (1) is a boy, but his skin is like jelly and his face is like a full moon, so he is called "Xiao Bai". Because of its good tutor atmosphere, the student has always been humble and polite, and is a "good man" in the eyes of students. In the past five years, he has never blushed or quarreled with his classmates. In class, he is often the person who sits most straight and listens most carefully. I still remember the way he reminded his classmates to attend class: he sat solemnly, quietly dragging his classmates with one hand, holding his mouth with one hand as a gesture to keep quiet, staring at the old teacher all the time, as if afraid of missing a word. His serious face is funny, because at that time, he was still a little doll in grade two! (insert)? 6? Now he has grown tall and strong. Approaching the height of 1.7 meters, I almost looked up when talking to him. His level of composition and mathematics is second to none in our class. Do not believe you: 6? Every winter, grandma is very busy. Before the clouds gather, thick cotton-padded clothes, trousers and jackets have already been put in the wardrobe. Every summer, thin quilts, all kinds of short-sleeved shorts skirts; Every autumn, autumn clothes and trousers, spring and autumn quilts; In spring, when grandma is free, she makes some artificial flowers to decorate the house. The three of us had nothing to do, so grandma made a dozen badminton for us to play in the house and have some fun. ? 6? This is a fragment of "I love you, Grandma" written by him. What's wrong, right? A Fei's oral expression ability and writing ability are relatively weak. Whenever he recites the text, his frowning brows and stuttering language (expression description) always make people feel anxious involuntarily; Whenever he writes new words silently, his font, which is flying while the dragon flies and the phoenix flies, and the red circles that appear frequently, will always give people an uncontrollable headache. But it can be seen that he has been working hard. As teachers, we don't have the heart to criticize him, but work with him to find the reasons and help him catch up as soon as possible. ? 6? 1 A Yang is also a boy, thin but handsome. Far from teddy boy's character. ? 6? 1 A Fei is calm and lively; Teddy boy is mature and A Yang is naive. (Contrast) A Yang is quick-thinking, and he is surprisingly good at math, science and other subjects, except for Chinese and English, but according to my observation, his Chinese subject is only poor in writing and memory. Because every time he asks questions that others can't answer in class, he can say one or two sentences, which shows that his thinking is clear and unquestionable. In my opinion, he can't consciously review and review what he has learned, which is probably the reason for his poor courses. ? 6? 1 A Fei and A Yang are two ordinary classmates in our class. They are classmates with different personalities, but they are filled with classmates. Maybe they are not perfect, but they think what their classmates think and are anxious about their classmates. I think they are the most perfect. Gorky said in his letter to his son:? 6? Whenever and wherever you leave people something beautiful, you will feel that all people need you, and' giving' is always more enjoyable than' taking'! ? 6? Now, my students practice this sentence with their own actions. I am very touched and look forward to their better tomorrow! ? 6? 1 student sample:? 6? Friday, 1, is a good day, but it brings me bad luck. On this day, a cool breeze blows gently, adding a graceful dance to the flowers on the roadside. (Landscape Description) I leaned against a soft duffel bag (with a cotton-padded jacket in it) and looked at a book leisurely. The breeze blew through the window, got into the car, opened the pages naughty from time to time, and looked at the road ahead, making me feel happier to go home. The bread truck quickly crossed the road and arrived at the hospital. ((action+mood)? 6? 1 I opened the car door, took off my schoolbag, and then I saw Xiao Rui who couldn't get down. I saw her, hand in hand, one foot off the ground, her face flushed even more, as if she were fighting a trapped animal. I have a good relationship with Xiao Rui. When I saw Xiao Rui's difficulties, I went to the front to help her take off her bag, hugged Xiao Rui's waist and immediately took her down. (action description)? 6? 1 It's about to cross the road, and cars and cars are flying by in front of us, as if they were deliberately against us. After waiting for a long time, there is only one spacious road left. I shouted: one, two, three! "Just shouted" 3 ",we rushed past like soldiers in charge, and every cell in the whole body seemed to be active. (metaphor+action+environment)? 6? 1 I said goodbye to Xiao Rui and walked happily to the hospital, but my back and heart always felt empty. Just as I was about to enter the door, I suddenly got a tingle and remembered-where is the luggage? Suddenly, my heart seemed to ignite a nameless fire, which seemed to burn my eyebrows. (emoticon+metaphor)? 6? 1 I rushed into the hospital: 6? Mom, give me the phone! Come on, come on. ? 6? 6 ? 6? Mom 1 was shocked by my excited expression. Q:? 6? What do you need a mobile phone for? ? 6? 6 ? 6? 1 ? 6? I left my luggage in the car! Call the teacher and contact the driver! ? 6? 6 ? 6? 1 mom gets bored when she listens. She gave me her mobile phone and began to complain about me. ? 6? 1 At this point, I am already very anxious. How can I listen to her reprimand? Dialed the number. Just after dialing the first number, a car appeared at the door. Isn't that my bus The impatience in my heart has been swept away by ecstasy. I rushed out excitedly, holding my schoolbag and shouting: 6? 5 thank you! ? 6? 6 What is a detailed description? Detail description is to enlarge a very small thing, such as an action, an expression and a feature with close-ups, and make readers "see people" and "see things" through accurate, vivid and meticulous description. Or the so-called detail description is a detailed description of some small links and plots that can well express the characters' thoughts and personalities. Good detail description can make the characters full of life and lifelike, and enhance the vividness, vividness and authenticity of the article. Detail description is the flesh and blood of narrative. Without detailed description, there is no vividness of images and events. It was another busy day when we passed by. From weekends to single weekends and from single weekends to non-stop days, the cycle of seven days is endless. Anyway, I can always see those eyes in some trance-like moments. I walked home and looked around aimlessly. Until a boy sitting on the stone platform by the roadside caught my attention. He is in Grade Four or Grade Five. As soon as I saw him, I thought he must be a cheerful child, but his confused eyes shooting ahead touched the deepest part of my heart. This kind of eye light should not belong to such a child, who is so lost, sad and with a trace of fear. The schoolbag at his feet tells me that he hasn't come home yet. I am surprised that the boy's behavior is so alien to him. Perhaps because of my gaze, the boy looked up at me and made me unforgettable. I have a hunch that he must have met something he can't bear. I came to my senses, walked on and went home. About half an hour later, I went shopping and saw the boy again. He sat there motionless, as if he had no intention of going home in a short time. I was more puzzled and stopped in the crowd. The only difference is that his schoolbag was changed from his foot to his side. With a piece of paper in his hand, his eyes deepened. Those eyes that don't belong to him are still crystal clear. Are they tears? I tried to get close to him so that he wouldn't find me. When I saw something on the paper, I stopped at once-the paper was a shocking score, so all my doubts were solved at once. A tear fell from his cheek, and his lost eyes shot into the distance again. He is only a pupil in grade four or five, and his loss, confusion, sadness and fear are all written on his tender face. How should these belong to him? He should be flying on the court, floating on the swing and rolling in the sand now, but it happened that he was as painful as losing something here. As a child, he should not imagine the disappointment of the teacher, the contempt of his classmates and the abuse of his parents. He turned his eyes to me again and hurt me again. My heart suddenly tightened, and his appearance was so familiar. I used to wander outside the house for that terrible score, and I cried for the scarlet letter on the white paper. I also know what will meet me when I go home. The child looked at me helplessly, his eyes were like a sharp light, burning my heart. His tears kept falling like broken crystals. He is just a child of eight or nine years old. I couldn't bear to watch any more, so I closed my eyes and turned away. Although I went home, Kexin was still there. Is he gone? Are you home yet? Did you get hit? I care about him too much to forget his eyes. From his eyes, I saw another me and more people. ? 6? 1 Description of portrait details? 6? 1 describes the details of the portrait. For example, in Daddy's Caregiver, the description of the patient's portrait is a detail. It is this detail that promotes the development of the festival. ? 6? 1 The boy stood up, looked at the patient's state and cried again. The patient suddenly opened his eyes and stared at the teenager. He seemed to have some consciousness, but he didn't speak. The patient is so thin that he can hardly tell whether it is his father or not. His hair is gray, his beard is long, and his face is swollen and black, as if his skin is going to break. Eyes narrowed, lips thickened, almost nothing like his father's usual appearance, only the outline of his face and eyebrows, and he looked a little like his father, and his breathing was weak. ? 6? 1 language description? 6? 1 is a typical language to describe a character in detail. For example, in "Deer Fetus Hitting Kansai Town", after Lu Da killed Kansai Town, he faked his death. This is a language detail, which shows Lu Da's bold and refined character, courage and wit. ? 6? 1 Rudihai said hypocritically, "You cheated to death, so you can fight again!" I saw the dough change gradually. Lu da thought, "I just want to give this fellow a good beating, and I don't want to kill him with three punches." Cudgel wants to go to court, and no one delivers food. It is better to spread it out early. " When he left, he turned back and pointed to Zheng Tu's body and said, "You faked your death, so take care!" A scolding, a striding away. ? 6? 1 action detailed description? 6? 1 describes the typical actions of the characters in depth and detail. For example, in the passage about Lu Da borrowing money to help Jin Lao's father and daughter in the boxing town of Lu Tiha, the verbs used vividly show the different personality characteristics of the three men. ? 6? 1 Lu Da added: "Come, old man! I'll spend some money with you. How about going back to Tokyo tomorrow? " The father and the daughter pleaded, "If we can go back to our hometown, we will be reborn as parents and have our parents again. It's just that the owner's family is willing to let go. Police officer Zheng must ask him for money. " "This is not a problem," Luti said. "I have my own reasons." Go to him, take out five taels of silver, put it on the table, look at Shi Jin and say, "Cudgel didn't bring more today;" Lend it to me if you have money, and I'll pay you back tomorrow. " Shi Jin said, "Why do you want my brother to give it back to me?" Go to the parcel and take out an ingot of twelve taels of silver and put it on the table. Lu Da looked at Jong Li and said, "You can borrow some, too." Jong Li walked a circle and took out two pieces of silver. Lu Dihai took a look at the young master and said, "He is also an unhappy man!" " Lu Da only gave the fifteen taels of silver to Jin Lao, saying, "You father and daughter pack your bags and go travelling expenses. I'll send you two up early tomorrow morning to see if the shopkeeper dares to keep you! " Lao Jin and his daughter went to thank humbly. Lu Da returned 100,000 taels of silver to Jong Li. ? 6? 1 Detailed description of psychological activities? 6? 1 describes the psychological activities of the characters in detail. For example, in the article "Daddy's Carer", the description of Sisillo's psychological activities after seeing "Daddy" seriously ill in his youth can well show the excellent quality of caring for his parents? 6? 1 The patient is still motionless, just breathing hard. The boy pulled up his chair in tears and sat there waiting, staring at his father. He thought:? 6? The doctor must come soon, and then we will know the details. ? 6? While a person was meditating sadly, I remembered my father's various things: seeing him off the boat last year and parting on the boat, he said that he had made money and the whole family had been waiting happily; After receiving the letter, my mother's sadness and my father's death flashed before my eyes. Even after my father died, my mother was still in mourning and the whole family cried. While he was meditating, he felt someone patting him on the shoulder and looked up in surprise. Turned out to be a nurse. ? 6? 1 Detailed description of expression changes? 6? 1 describes the changing process of characters' expressions in detail. In the article Seven Matches, the description of the expression change after the unknown soldier handed the match to Lu Jinyong is a detail worth tasting. ? 6? 1 that comrade opened the paper bag with trembling hands, which was a party card; Uncover the party card, there is a small pile of matches inside. Charred matches. The red matches are clustered together, and the positive pressure is in the center of the scarlet seal, like a jumping flame. ? 6? Comrade, look ... "Comrade waved to Lu Jinyong. When he got close, he stretched out a stiff finger and carefully fingered the matches one by one, whispering:? 6? Five, two, three, four ... "A * * * has seven matches, but he counts for half a day. After counting, I looked at Lu Jinyong inquiringly, as if to say: 6? Do you understand? ""yes, I see! " Lu Jinyong nodded happily and thought:? 6? 5 this is easy to handle! "He seemed to see a red fire, and he and this comrade snuggled up by the fire ... At this moment, he found that this comrade's face seemed to stick out, and the embers in his eyes suddenly disappeared, bursting with joy. I saw him close his party card and hold it in his hand, carefully stuffing it into Liu Jinyong's hand like holding a bowl full of water, holding it tightly in his hand and staring at his face. ? 6? Remember, this is, this is, everyone's! "He suddenly withdrew his hand, took a deep breath and lifted it with all his strength, pointing to true north:? 6? 5 Good, good comrades ... You ... You take it to ... "That's all. ? 6? 1 Description of scene details? 6? 1 is a detailed description of the development and changes of things. For example, in the article "Lutai Beats Kansai Town", the description of how Lutai killed Kansai Town with three punches can be regarded as a detailed description of the development and changes of things. ? 6? 1 Zheng Tu took the knife in his right hand and grabbed Luda with his left hand; Ruled by this Luti, he put down his left hand and hurried in. He looked at his stomach and kicked it into the street. Lu da took another step, stepped on his chest, raised his fist the size of a vinegar bowl, and looked at Zheng Tu. 6? Cudgel began to invest in his old business, and it is not a waste to be called' the town of Kansai'! You are a butcher selling meat, a dog-like person, and also called' True Kansai'! How did you cheat Jin Cuilian? ? 6? Six punched on the nose, and the blood gushed out, and the nose was half crooked, but it seemed that a sauce shop had been opened, and all the salty, sour and spicy things rolled out. Zheng Tu couldn't make any money, so he threw the sharp knife aside and shouted. 6? 5 well played! ? 6? 6 Lu Da scolded:? 6? 5 straight mother thief! How dare you answer! ? 6? When lifting the fist, it only hits the eyebrows, and the eyes are cracked and black beads burst out. It seems that a colorful silk shop has been opened, and red, black and purple will burst out. 3. Several problems to pay attention to when writing details: (1) Writing details well and careful observation are the basis. Everyone has different personality characteristics, so everyone will express his personality in different ways when he speaks or does things. What we have to do is to observe carefully and then accumulate it as writing material. That's how people are described. When describing the scenery and objects in detail, we should grasp the characteristics and changes of the scenery. (2) The description of details should obey the needs of the performance center, and strive for meaningful details. Detail description is a way to see the big from the small. Although the details are light in weight, they are large in capacity. When we choose the details, we should start with the details, focus on the big picture, see the big picture from the small, and let the small details reflect people's ideological situation and social outlook. Lu Xun wrote in his novel Kong Yiji that when Kong Yi first appeared, he "paid nine pence and a lot of money" when he bought wine. This detail shows Kong Yiji's face-saving, ostentatious, poor and pedantic personality as a low-level scholar, and reveals the persecution of people by the feudal system. (3) The more detailed the description in the article, the better. We should choose something that is representative, general and can reflect a profound theme. For example, Lu Xun wrote several times in "Blessing" that Master Lu Si "frowned". This subtle change in facial expression profoundly exposed the reactionary stance and ugly soul of feudal gentlemen who hated widows and maintained the old ethics. (4) The detailed description must be typical and true. The so-called truth means that the detailed description can accurately and vividly reflect the characteristics of people in real life. The so-called typicality refers to the details described, which are widely representative, and can reflect the general and the whole picture through individual and small things, and reveal the essence through phenomena. For example, in Zhao Shuli's Untouchable Hands, there is such a description: "Round fingers, round belly, like a small rake made of trees" and "all like nails on half a cocoon". This meticulous description is both true and typical, highlighting the characteristics of its protagonist and showing the characteristics of the people's strength and hard work. Another example is Zhu Ziqing's description of his father's struggling appearance and movements when he climbed onto the platform in Back, which highlighted his selfless love for me and touched every reader. His success lies in his careful observation and accurate expression of his father's behavior. (5) The language should be refined. Some students think that a detailed description is a tireless description, and the more detailed the better. This view is inaccurate. To grasp the most vivid point to describe, other places can pass by, and detailed description does not mean verbosity. In short, although the details are very small, its role should not be underestimated. Good detail description can make the characters vivid and enhance the authenticity, vividness and appeal of the content. Detail description is a point in the scene, without which there is no scene; It is also a bead in the plot, without which the plot will not be coherent. Example 1: Interesting things in the class. In order to enliven the atmosphere, the teacher suggested that everyone choose a classmate to sing in front of the podium. Gee, this is an interesting thing. Who should I choose? Before the song was finished, the atmosphere in the classroom was already alive. Everyone is whispering, talking, like a group of bees, flying into a hundred flowers, buzzing, and like a group of little yellowbirds, stepping on sunny branches and twittering. The classroom is boiling! "Choose the monitor!" I don't know who shouted a voice, but as soon as the shout fell, the whole class said in unison, "Yes, choose the monitor!" " Several boys also kept booing: "monitor, come!" "Monitor, coming!" Oh, how lively! Didn't say, monitor Zhang Xueqing walked to the front of the platform. The teacher asked her what to sing, and she said generously, "I will sing" The Year of the Child "for everyone, hoping that everyone will return to the happiness of childhood. Don't laugh at me if you can't sing well. " -Seriously, the monitor is really interesting, haha ... "Under the banyan tree by the pond, cicadas are calling for summer ..." The monitor sang high for a while, low for a while, charming for a while, and then left the tune. Everyone was secretly happy, but they were afraid that she would see it, so they had to lower their heads, cover their mouths, and some even leaned their heads on the table. After the monitor finished singing, everyone looked up and congratulated her on the success of the performance with laughter and applause. The monitor unexpectedly gave everyone a 90-degree bow. Haha, the pot is boiling again after work. The monitor is really interesting. The teacher also smiled. He said: "Seeing that everyone is so happy, the teacher is young. In order to make tonight better, please ask another student to sing for you, ok? " "good!" The students responded in unison. "Who will sing?" The teacher smiled and called for the brave. "Who sang it?" Students are like echoes of an echo wall. Haha, students are really naughty. "I will do it!" Everyone looked inside. It turned out to be Yang Haiyan. She had strode to the podium, wearing her little red riding hood and a shiny key around her neck. Yang Haiyan is a classmate who just transferred from dingfuzhuang. How to sing is really a mystery. There was a silence, and the applause of "wow-"took a long time. At first, Yang Haiyan winked at everyone, bowed naughtily, and then said in everyone's laughter, "When I sing in the future, please don't laugh at me like Zhang Xueqing, otherwise I can't help it." As soon as my voice fell, I bent over with laughter. Well, she exposed all of us, so I won't hit her for a while. Speaking of which, all the students' eyes are shining with friendliness and love. Yang Haiyan began to sing. She sang "Treading on the Waves", which was crisp and sweet. Unexpectedly, this "Little Red Riding Hood" really has some talent for singing. The classroom suddenly became quiet, and all the students recognized God. I also closed my eyes, shook my head and beat my feet. After a song was sung, there was applause. Yang Haiyan sang another song, where is happiness? Singing always reminds us of beautiful reality and always brings us into dreamlike dreams. Yes, where is happiness? It's not in the shade, it's not in the greenhouse, it's in the hard sweat, and it's also in our happy collective ... Singing, Yang Haiyan is also cheerful and active, and her voice is getting clearer and clearer. Oh, I will never forget her radiant face under the fluorescent lamp; I will never forget her lovely children's voice on a quiet night. I turned and looked out of the window. There were stars in the dark sky. Hey, I don't know when, one pair, two pairs, three pairs ... small eyes like stars are stuck on the glass window; And one, two, three squashed little noses, haha, that's really interesting. The ultra-small solo party drove away fatigue and brought us joy; It wiped away the fatigue from the corner of our eyes and brought tears of laughter. How I hope that these silvery songs and crystal tears of joy will form a string of shining pearls that will run through my junior high school study and life. Comments: Many students may have encountered such interesting things in the group, but without a pair of keen eyes and a sensitive heart, a pen that is diligent in sports will not have such content to put into words. We can pay attention to two details. The first song: "Who will sing?" The teacher smiled and called for the brave. "Who sang it?" Students are like echoes of an echo wall. Haha, classmates are really naughty. This detail vividly shows the excitement and happiness of the students. The second one:. Hey, I don't know when, one pair, two pairs, three pairs ... small eyes like stars are stuck on the glass window; And one, two, three squashed little noses, haha, that's really interesting. This detail vividly shows the attraction of this ultra-small solo evening from the side. Example 2: My teacher's surname is Lai, in his early thirties, of medium build and wearing a pair of short-sighted glasses with black frames. Since teaching us, in my impression, Xiaoxiao seems to have never left his mouth. The most unforgettable thing is that he gave us the first lesson. That day, he came into the classroom with a smile and introduced himself: "My name is Lai ..." His voice did not fall, and a naughty boy stood up and asked strangely: "Is it Toad's Toad?" Suddenly, the whole class burst into laughter. After the laughter, there was an awkward silence in the classroom. I am secretly worried: Did the teacher leave in a hurry or did the volcano erupt? Where's Teacher Lai? Smiled, turned around and wrote a beautiful big word "Lai" on the blackboard as an answer, as if nothing had happened just now, and our hanging hearts were put down! -Teacher Lai, it's really not "Lai"! In this way, Teacher Lai began to come into our lives and into my heart. In class, his cadence is sometimes like a trickle, refreshing, and sometimes like a roaring wave, shocking. His every move gives people a natural, decent and generous feeling. In this way, Teacher Lai became the object of students' imitation. Once, I stood on the podium and learned to recite ancient Chinese in the deep and rich voice of Teacher Lai, only to be found by him. My heart thumped and I was surprised. Many students used to learn from him and never got caught. Today, I ... he ordered me with a serious expression: "recite it again." I said timidly, "Teacher Lai, I ... Please forgive me!" " "When he saw me like this, he couldn't help laughing and said," Forgive you for what? I think you just looked like a little teacher! I want you to try to practice. In two days, the school will hold a speech contest. You can participate. " A stone in my heart fell to the ground -Lai teacher, you really don't' lai'! If Mr. Lai's first class taught me how to respect people, and if he taught me how to understand people, then the story Mr. Lai told me made me understand the value of teachers and strengthened my own beliefs. That day, I asked him, "Teacher Lai, many teachers have changed careers. You are so learned and so young, why are you still here? He smiled: "Let me tell you a story." "So, I heard the following story: Once upon a time, there was a king who wanted to award a most precious medal to a person who made the greatest contribution to society. On that day, generals, ministers, inventors and other celebrities were all here. The king did not award the medal to any of them, but to an old lady who had taught all her life. People were puzzled. The king said, "She is a pioneer of human wisdom. "Lai teacher's story is over, I haven't recovered. When Teacher Lai walked towards the blooming flowers in the classroom, I suddenly understood, and silently said, "Teacher Lai, wait for me, and I will follow in your footsteps …" Thank you, my teacher Lai!