1. Excellent professor of Chinese Department in Peking University, with more than 30 years' teaching experience. (The word order of multiple attributes is incorrect)

Changed to: Excellent Professor of Chinese Department of Peking University, with more than 30 years' teaching experience.

In order to write the paper assigned by the teacher, many students have been reading eagerly in the reading room in recent days. (Many adverbials are out of order)

In order to write the paper assigned by the teacher, many students have been reading eagerly in the reading room in recent days.

He jumped out of the pond and came to the edge of the pool, swimming fast. (Clauses are out of order)

He came to the pool, jumped into the pond and swam quickly.

We have carefully studied and listened to your opinions.

Words can reflect the meanings of inheritance and priority. Word order must meet this objective requirement. In this case, "learning and listening" reverses the order of commitment. It should be changed to "listening to research")

Students, leaders and teachers all attended the opening ceremony. (It should be changed to "leaders, teachers and students")

6. Let's see all the flowers in vilen. (It should be changed from "Yan Shan Hua" to "Yan Shan Hua" to match the following "opening")

7. The Palace Museum recently exhibited the newly unearthed cultural relics more than 2,000 years ago. When was this "cultural relic" unearthed? According to the original sentence, it was "more than two thousand years ago", but it was not. This is because the word order is not current, which leads to ideographic errors. We should move the "newly unearthed" to the "exhibition" )

8. This village has well implemented the Party's policy of enriching the people. Now, we have not only sold 60,000 Jin of agricultural grain to the country, but also stopped eating state relief. (If the progressive relationship is improper, it should be changed to "not only don't eat state relief grain, but also sell 60 thousand Jin of public grain to the state") 9. In your own way. They are exploring, they are judging, they are searching, and they are thinking.

Second, improper collocation.

[Example 2]

1. People's living standards are constantly improving. (If the subject and predicate are not properly matched, the word "improvement" should be changed to "improvement")

His revolutionary spirit always comes to my eyes. ("Spirit" and "Emergence" cannot form a subject-predicate relationship. You can change "spirit" to "image")

What a beautiful picture the rustling waves and the silver sea make up. Both "wave" and "sea surface" are subjects, in which "wave" cannot form a subject-predicate relationship with the predicate "component", so "rustling wave" should be removed or another subject-predicate relationship should be formed.

Due to reasonable close planting and strengthening management, rice production in this county is generally growing well. ("Yield" and "growing well" cannot form a subject-predicate relationship, so "yield" should be deleted and "rice" should be used as the subject)

Every time I recall a life with him, his amiable voice, smiling face and persuasive teaching reappear in front of my eyes. "Teaching" and "appearance" constitute an improper subject-predicate relationship, so "persuasion teaching" can be removed. "It's better to add" ringing in my ear again "to form a subject-predicate relationship with it)

6. The novel Song of Youth vividly depicts the heroic deeds of Lu Jiachuan, Jiang Hua and Lin Hong in party member. ("Shaping" and "deeds" cannot form the relationship between object and predicate, so "deeds" can be changed to "image")

7. The soldiers braved heavy rain and muddy roads to make rapid progress. ("Crossing the Kanto" and "Small Road" can't form a predicate-object relationship, so "in" and "on" can be added before and after "Muddy Road" respectively)

The students watched and listened to the report of Laoshan hero with admiration. (The "gaze" in the joint predicate cannot match the object "report" and can be deleted)

9. The plots cultivated by farmers that meet the policy requirements are a kind of legitimate labor. (Improper collocation of subject and object)

10. Two short regular parallel lines are always two unreachable endpoints. The meaning of subject and object in the judgment sentence does not belong to the same category, which leads to improper collocation of subject and object. In this case, "two parallel lines are endpoints" is obviously not properly matched, so "endpoints" can be changed to "straight lines" and so on. )

1 1. We firmly believe that one day, China's industry and agriculture will become developed countries. The object of this sentence is a subject-predicate phrase, but the main part of the subject-predicate phrase is "industry and agriculture become a country", and the meaning of the subject and object is obviously inappropriate. You can change "country" to "industry" and so on. )

12. Autumn in Beijing is a beautiful season. This is because the word order is improper, which leads to the improper meaning of the subject and object, so "Autumn in Beijing" should be changed to "Autumn in Beijing".

13. Whether you have lofty aspirations and tenacious will is the key to a person's success. (One side and two sides are not properly matched) 14. Whether the electronic industry can develop rapidly and penetrate into all walks of life depends on accelerating the training of a group of specialized talents. (The use of "whether" in front is two aspects. There is only a positive side behind, which is inconsistent. You can change "to" to ") 15. Young men and women no longer choose their partners on the basis of property and family status, but on the basis of working ability and scientific and cultural knowledge. (In the front, "quantity" and "height" are related to both sides, and in the back, they are only related to one side, which is inconsistent. You can change "can" to "can" and "have" to "have")

16. The academic performance is an important condition for three-good students. The front is "good or bad", and the back is only positive, which is inconsistent. You can add "Can you be a good student" before "Three Good Students")

17. The car is driving on a wide road. (The modifier is not properly matched with the head language, so "broad" should be changed to "broad") 18. At five or six o'clock in the morning, tens of thousands of people stood on both sides of the street leading to the airport. ("Crowd" is a whole noun, which can no longer be limited by "tens of thousands", but "crowd" can be changed to "people")

19. We carefully studied the suggestions of the employees and humbly sought the opinions of experts. (The adverbial of "seriousness" cannot modify and restrict "research", but can be changed to "seriousness" and "caution". The students cleaned the classroom neatly. ("Clean" can supplement the degree of sweeping the floor. However, "neatness" and "cleanliness" cannot be matched. You can add "table stool" in front or delete it. )

Third, it is illogical.

[Example 3]

1. At night, from a distance, the whole building was dark, and only one room was still lit. (self-contradictory)

Now that he's here, he's still worried. (Misuse of related words)

I'm not interested in math. In this sentence, the subject is "I" and the object is "Mathematics", which should be changed to "I am interested in mathematics". Ostrovsky's How Steel was Tempered is no stranger to young people in China. (It can be changed to "China youth are no strangers to ostrovsky's How Steel was Tempered")

More than 800 people, with thousands of troops and horses, struggled with the rainstorm and flood for a day and a night. (How can "more than 800 people" have thousands of arms? Should be changed from "thousand" to "thousand")

He was furious, studied hard and completed all the courses in the university in three years. ("All the courses in the university" are vast, and it is not objective to finish them in only three years, so "all" can be removed. )

7. When you stand on the shore and look at the boundless sea, a magnificent picture of our ancestors will emerge before your eyes, which is made at sunrise and returned at sunset. (since it is "looking at the sea", the picture presented later should be the scene at sea. This expression sees the scene on land, which is inconsistent. The word "sea" can be changed to "vast land" and so on. )

This year, 90% of the students in our school participated in the "Volunteer Commando". The word "all" means all, and the previous definition was "90%", which is inconsistent and should be removed. )

No one will deny that the Yangtze River does not flow eastward. ("No denial" means "recognition", and "recognition" means "the Yangtze River does not flow eastward", which obviously does not conform to the objective facts. You can change "deny" to "admit", or remove the second "no")

10. Can you deny that you shouldn't study hard? The answer to the rhetorical question is on the opposite side of the sentence. If you don't use rhetorical questions, negation is appropriate, but if you use rhetorical questions, the meaning is just the opposite. "No" can be removed)

1 1. Over the past few years, he has been collecting and sorting out folk songs and accumulated a lot of information. "Always" means "always", and the sentence expression is just the opposite, so "forget" can be changed to "yes".

12. Young workers, old workers and women attended the railway workers' congress. (improper classification and enumeration. "Young workers" and "old workers" are divided by the same standard, while "women" are different standards, so they cannot be juxtaposed with the first two, and "women" can be removed)

13. All league members, especially middle school students, should study science and culture hard. (The object to be emphasized by the word "special" should be the part of the above-mentioned concept that forms a range relationship with the front, while "middle school students" and "league members" can only be cross-related, so "middle school students" should be changed to "middle school students' league members". )

14. I bought toothpaste, toothbrush and daily necessities in the street. ("Toothpaste", "toothbrush" and "daily necessities" are not juxtaposed, but subordinate, so "harmony" should be changed to "equality")

Fourth, the structure is chaotic.

[Example 4]

1. What I can't tell you is that the school gave this task to our class, and everyone felt honored. (Miscellaneous)

Since China people accepted Marxism–Leninism, under the leadership of Comrade Mao Zedong, great changes have taken place in China's revolution. (changing hands halfway)

As far as the students' schoolwork burden is concerned, it is too hard for teachers to be buried in the homework pile all the year round. (anti-customer first. Before the first sentence was finished, it was interrupted by the second sentence and replaced by another topic)

As the leading cadres of party member and the Party, we should take the fundamental interests of the Party and the people as the starting point. The second half is a mixture of "starting from ..." and "starting from ...", which can be changed from "from ... to" using ") 5. Throughout the ages, no one denies that talented people with outstanding achievements have the spirit of struggle. (The predicate part is a mixture of a judgment sentence and a statement sentence. You can add "de" at the end of the sentence to form the emphasis structure of "yes", or you can remove "yes")

6. Survival published by Shanghai Literature and Art Publishing House was written by a Chinese Canadian writer who has lived overseas for more than 20 years. (It is a mixture of subject-predicate sentences and verb-predicate sentences, and the "author" at the end of the sentence can be removed)

7. If you don't study hard, you can imagine how to get good grades. (It is a mixture of rhetorical questions and declarative sentences, so we should remove "imaginable" and add "what is it" after "achievement")

Verb (abbreviation of verb) is ambiguous.

[Example 5]

1. I have made great progress in my three years of high school life. Because teachers are strict with themselves. It is not clear whether "ego" refers to the teacher or "me", and "ego" can be changed to "me" according to the context.

On the day of the reunion of old classmates, Zhang Qing and Wang Jie said as soon as they met, "Do you still know him?" ("He" means Zhang Qing or Jesson Wang? Can be changed to "Zhang Qing")

Sixth, the composition is redundant or incomplete

1 has redundant components.

[Example 6- 1]

1. The official salary of foreign experts should generally be higher or maintained during the probation period, but not lower than the probation period. (It has been defined as "above or maintained", and "below" is explicitly excluded, and then "below probation salary" is repeated and should be deleted)

2. Five-star winery decided to punish Chen Xinyao and others for staying in the factory for two years. During the period of punishment, only living expenses will be paid every month, and no bonus will be paid. (In front of the second sentence, it has been explained that "only living expenses are paid" and bonuses have been ruled out. Let's talk about "free bonuses" again. Duplicates should be deleted. )

3. Xuelian brand shirts, regardless of style or quality. Still packaging, it can be called first-class in the country. ("Kan" originally means "can", so "can" should be used in front of it, and "can" should be removed if it is repeated. )

Judging from his weak breathing, he is not dead, and he still has a breath. The reason why I didn't do well in this exam is that I didn't carefully examine the questions according to the teacher's requirements. (The redundant subject "reason" is repeated with the following "because", and the "reason" or "because" is removed)

6. Lao She's writing style has always shared weal and woe with the people. ("Style" should be removed)

7. The lecture notes borrowed from your college last time are being printed and can be distributed to students before class. (The predicate "continue" is redundant and should be deleted)

8. Ten players on the basketball court are having a fierce game. ("Dozen" is redundant and should be deleted)

9. Balzac, a famous French novelist, devoted his life to compiling a human tragedy. (The object "redundancy" is redundant and should be deleted)

10. Today, I came to the Slender West Lake in Yangzhou and visited the Baita, Diaoyutai and Wu Ting Bridge. ("place" is redundant and should be deleted)

1 1. There are fertile land, rich mineral deposits and mountain villages full of countless treasures. (The word "various" with redundant additional parts is redundant and should be deleted.)

12. Before school started, we had a military training. The coach in charge of military training is a company with a big beard and small eyes. ("Responsible for military training" is redundant and should be deleted)

13. Judgment is a form of thinking that affirms or denies whether something has a certain nature. ("Whether" is redundant should be deleted) 14. The mountains are full of fruits: pears, apples, persimmons ... ("everywhere" and "everywhere" are repeated, so it is better to delete "everywhere" because "everywhere" has more emphasis) 5438+05. In order to simplify the number of words, ("some" is repeated with the previous "slightly added", but it can be deleted)

2 Incomplete composition

[Example 7]

1. With the help of teachers and classmates, I have made rapid progress. Due to the frequent use of prepositions or object-object structures, the original subject becomes adverbial, and the lack of subject in the whole sentence is the main manifestation of incomplete subject. In this sentence, the words "in" and "under" should be deleted or the word "make" should be deleted. ) 2. Jiangnan gifted scholar was taken home by Wang Laohu and sent to his sister's room. (Because the sentence is long, changing the subject secretly is also an important aspect of subject missing. The subject of the first half of this sentence is "zhou wenbin" and the second half is "Wang Tiger", so the subject "Wang Tiger" should be added to the last sentence. )

3. The school has made remarkable achievements in education and teaching, and has been commended by provincial and municipal education committees for many times. (Because the partial positive part of the partial positive phrase is misunderstood as "zhong".