1, the beginning of the article is concise and appropriate, and the environmental description sets off the emotions of the characters, which is very artistic.

2. The beginning is brief and to the point.

3. The beginning of the article is novel and serves as a warning. Let readers have the impression of … as soon as they meet.

The beginning of the article is fascinating and attracts readers. The combination of point and surface makes the article vivid, concrete and meticulous.

5. The language of the article is vivid and readable.

6. This article is novel in material selection, which arouses readers' desire to read.

building-up process

1, full of passion, describing ...

2, focused, detailed and appropriate, specific content.

3. The metaphor is appropriate and the words are vivid.

4. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life and friendly to read.

5 ... tell us in a relaxed and happy tone, which is unforgettable.

6. The narrative is natural and vivid, with compact structure, coherent connection with nature and prominent center.

7. For the description of the scenery, the language is concise and accurate, while the association is touching the scene, and the scene is naturally integrated.

8. By enriching the characters' language and actions, the ideological quality of the characters is set off.

9. This article is lyrical in narration.

10, make full use of the combination of static and dynamic writing, supplemented by metaphor, personification and other techniques.

1 1. The author observes carefully and narrates orderly.

12, the use of some subtle words invisibly adds a lot of interest to the article.

General comments

1, the article is miscellaneous but not chaotic, but it can be detailed and focused.

This article fully and appropriately exaggerates the atmosphere of … and gives a detailed and vivid description of the key points of the article.

3, ... practical, contains simple and profound philosophy, exciting and emotional to read.

This article is full of passion. Between the lines, we can understand the little author's love for …. The full text has distinct levels and fluent sentences.

5. The case narrative is vivid, concrete and interesting, which is in line with the previous metaphor. Finally, the author expressed his feelings for … in a few words, which is touching.

6. The article is well organized and forms a complete image.