My aunt is very hardworking. Every time I go home, I see her working there. There are hundreds of thousands of bags made for her every month (only a few thousand pieces). Aunt has to do housework after she finishes her work. Sometimes there is a lot of work waiting for her, and menstruation is too busy. I am always reluctant to part with it, and I will help him at this time. Having said that, I really want to say to my aunt, "aunt, I'll do it!" You are already very tired! " Diligence is something that can't be bought in the world. Diligence is the greatest wealth in the world. Only by making efforts can we have a good return!
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A Letter to My Aunt Dear Aunt:
Hello!
How about Hechuan?
The book you gave me is very good. Sometimes when I see wonderful places, I dream when I sleep. I dreamed of the brave Robinson, and with my help, I returned to England fifteen years earlier. I used the gold Robinson gave me to visit Disneyland in America. I dreamed that the Statue of Liberty waved to me. . . . . . Aunt, I like reading more and more. Reading has made me clear about love and hate, broadened my horizons and really benefited me a lot.
Tell you, auntie, there is one thing that I find very interesting. On that day, our school held the "May Day Labor Art Festival". The whole school is like a palace, so beautiful! Those programs are really wonderful. There are our students' instrumental solos, Peking Opera and so on. , and the teacher's program! All kinds of programs dazzle us. There is also a labor art exhibition, which contains many photo frames, necklaces and bracelets, students' red notebooks and models. In the red reading notebook, there are some good words and sentences that you read after reading extracurricular books. Our class has a sales area, and our class is responsible for selling photo frames. Suddenly, there was a bargaining sound on the playground. Listen: "How about a little cheaper, 1 RMB 5?" "No, you have to think about our cost!" . . . . . . How lively it is! Finally sold more than 60 yuan, we were elated!
Aunt, do you want to ask me about my academic performance? This is my little secret, so I won't tell you for the time being. However, I won't let you down. I will give you a surprise when I go home during the Spring Festival.
Oh, by the way, don't forget to buy me some books when you come back!
Wish: good health and smooth work!
Your niece: Sabrina.
May 2006
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In the afternoon at my aunt's house, my aunt took me home to play this afternoon, and I also took the homework my mother asked me to finish. When I arrived at my aunt's house, my aunt asked me to wash my hands and have a rest before doing my homework. After I told my cousin, I went to work. My cousin asked me to do my homework, and she accompanied me to read the book. Whenever I can't, I ask her questions, and she patiently answers them for me. After finishing my homework, I feel a little hungry. Cousin brought me watermelon to eat. We watch TV while eating snacks, and laugh together when we see funny. How time flies! My aunt came back from work to take me home. Menstruation said, you are welcome to come and play again.
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I haven't played checkers with my aunt for a long time. Tonight, my aunt asked me to kill some vegetables with her. I am very happy to hear the news.
It began to rain. I played well at first, blocking my aunt's chess. "Ha ha, I see how you go this time?" I proudly finished, borrowed my aunt's chess and jumped a few steps. "ouch!" It's a pity that although I jumped a few steps, menstruation's chess pieces jumped more than ten steps and went straight to my square. I tried my best to fight back, and menstruation made me regret it several times. I lost the next two sets. I feel particularly sad.
My aunt looked at me gloomily and said, "Don't lose heart. Playing chess is not just a matter of winning or losing. The most important thing is to exercise your will and increase your thinking ability. " I think menstruation is right. At the same time, I think, don't be arrogant, and we will have a competition tomorrow.
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A letter to a distant aunt Dear aunt:
Hello!
How have you been recently? Are you healthy? I am very happy now. Don't worry about me. My study is progressing smoothly. I have a good life now. If you are free, you can come to my house or I can go to your house. You are always welcome!
Wish you all the best.
Good health, smooth work and happiness every day!
Your niece: ×××
X month x day
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My aunt, aunt
My aunt is very lively and cheerful. She lives in my home now, and he works in Su Guo with a monthly salary of 1300.
People with high noses are also very beautiful, very beautiful. Ears are not big, eyes are big and eyelashes are long. Wear glasses. He loves me very much. He picks me up from school every day.
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My aunt saw the police smash the illegal processing dens on TV today. What are illegal processing dens? It turned out to be inferior wine. It is to recycle old bottles of famous wines at home and abroad, put inferior wines on them and sell them. Inferior wine with a cost of two yuan is disguised as imported famous wine with a cost of more than two hundred yuan. Because the appearance and anti-counterfeiting label of this wine are almost exactly the same as that of real wine, but the wholesale price is only half of that of real wine, so many high-end office buildings and star-rated hotels use this inferior wine as real wine, committing the crime of making dirty money.
This reminds me of having dinner at my grandmother's house the other day.
Our family happily ate the New Year's Eve dinner and soon drank two bottles of Wuliangye. Grandma took two empty wine bottles and was about to take out the garbage. I saw my aunt stop her and said, "If this bottle is recycled, it will be bad to put fake wine." So, aunt picked up a plastic bag to cover the bottle and smashed it on the ground, and the bottle broke. Aunt said: "Now that the wine bottle is broken, it won't hurt anyone again." So I went to take out the garbage.
I think: If more people in this world are as cautious as my aunt and don't let illegal traders take advantage of it, then we will all benefit in the end.
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My aunt is a great person. Speaking of my dear aunt, she has many advantages: humor, filial piety and responsibility for her work. ...
My aunt has never had children because of physical reasons. Although there are some regrets, she often comforts herself: "Only in this way can I have more time and energy to do more worthwhile things."
My aunt likes cats and dogs very much. She keeps cat food and dog food at home and in the car all the year round. Wherever she sees stray cats and dogs, she will take out food to feed them. My aunt often has stray cats and dogs. She always takes pains to help them: feed them, feed them with water, build a cat house and dog shed, and sterilize them. Last year, Jingha Expressway rescued 500 dogs, and my aunt also participated in the rescue work. She stayed up all night that day and her voice was hoarse. Looking at her aunt's red eyes, I asked her: Why are you working so hard? Menstruation asked me: Aren't they the same life? Since then, I have joined this "animal rescue team".
My aunt not only cares about small animals, but also is a volunteer. She often participates in volunteer activities and saves her salary to help those in need.
During the summer vacation, my aunt took me to the "Sun Village" to donate items. I saw my aunt cramming her car with toys, books and electrical appliances. When I arrived at the "Sun Village", my aunt struggled to move the big bags one by one. Her clothes were wet and sweat ran down her cheeks. In the bright sunshine, the sweat between her eyebrows exudes colorful light, which is particularly charming. Watching my aunt move things into the children's hut and give them one by one, listening to the children's cheerful laughter, my aunt's face was filled with a happy smile. My aunt said that her dream is to be a teacher in the mountainous area and help more children get out of the mountains and poverty. ...
I have always thought that nobility can only be used on great men and heroes, but through my aunt's experience, I feel that if an ordinary person can persevere and try his best to do what she has done for him, even if it is only a small thing, an ordinary thing is noble in my eyes. My aunt is a noble ordinary person around me. I hope I can be a person like my aunt!
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