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Content: The introduction is concise and distinct, and the description of Wuzhen people and environment also captures the characteristics. The last paragraph is very good, lively, interesting and attractive.

Overall comments: There are many students who travel during the summer vacation and many who write travel notes. This article should be regarded as more distinctive. The little author has a good ability to summarize things, and he can always grasp the characteristics to describe them, so that readers are very interested in reading. I hope to keep it up and write better works!

The first day of visiting the West Lake

Content: The text at the beginning is more like a diary than a composition. The beginning of the composition is very important. I suggest not to be so casual.

General comment: This is a travel note, and the author describes the process of visiting the scenic spot of West Lake in a more vivid way. The works are interesting and easy to read. However, travel notes are not simply described in sequence, and it is easy to become a running account. Young writers can focus on the description of "three pools reflecting the moon" in their compositions, and make some weak descriptions of other parts, which can make the articles coherent.

Youxianlin University Town

Content: The word "gone with the wind" is well used, which not only conforms to the characteristics of red scarf, but also reflects the relaxed and happy mood of students. This paragraph of language is concise and clear, and it has substance in words. This paper briefly describes the gains of the second study tour. The young author quickly applied the scientific vocabulary he learned to his composition, and imagined the development of science, which is enough to show his attitude of loving science. The little author showed his observation and understanding of the library and benefited a lot from his big brother and sister, which was very good.

Overall comment: The whole article reads very smoothly, describes the three occasions of "Biology Museum", "Science Museum" and "Library" in chronological order, and briefly expounds the knowledge and feelings I have learned, which is really amazing!

The tone of the article is smooth and the structure is clear. It is not difficult for us to see that the little author is meticulous in thinking and has good language control ability. Although the article is not long, I believe the author has experienced a wonderful and profound trip to Xianlin University Town! I also hope that the young author can explore more unique insights in his life!

Qingdao seaside tour

Content: The content describes the calm and surging sea, and the author compares the sea to "blue gem" and "runaway wild horse" respectively, which is more appropriate.

General comment: The article describes an experience of the little author who went to Qingdao to see the sea. The article is fluent, imaginative and vivid, and his love for the sea is revealed between the lines. Some places (such as chatting with mom on the way, how to play with sand, etc.). ) It's better to be more specific.