Teaching objectives
1. Observe and feel life with your heart, and learn to capture subtle inner touches.
2. Start with trivial matters and write your true feelings.
3. Expand association and imagination to create a distant artistic conception.
Emphasis and difficulty in teaching
1. By studying, you can describe your true experience and express your true feelings in your composition.
2. Capture material from ordinary things and ordinary life.
Time allocation
2 class hours
? Instructional Design (Designer:)
Teaching process design
First, import
When it comes to writing a composition, many students feel headache. When they raise their pens and stare at the topic, they always feel that they have nothing to say. There is a couplet that vividly describes the painful situation of students facing the composition questions.
The first part: sit down and think seriously. Part II: Sorrow and sadness. Follow-up: I can't write it.
However, some well-written students in the class are always full of ideas and have endless new things to write. Vivid and interesting articles can attract others, be praised by teachers and be envied by classmates. What is the secret of their successful composition? I think, first of all, we should have a pair of eyes, a sensitive heart, be good at observing and feeling life, choose suitable materials from them, and express our sunny life wishes and interests. I believe you can write a touching article.
Second, check the preview.
Question 1: Please choose the one you like from the texts you have studied and tell me the one that moves you most.
Design intention: By reviewing the text content, guide the students to find the materials that can be written in life.
Teacher-student activities: students speak.
Third, moving and sharing (appreciation of examples)
Question 2: Read the following article and tell me what it says. What impressed you the most? Why can I impress you?
Design intention: to cultivate students' sensitivity to life and guide them to be good at finding moving points from ordinary life.
Teacher-student activities: teacher-student interaction.
Composition:
limp
It is late at night. I tossed and turned in bed. My parents have not come back yet. I'm a little scared and angry. A family of three crowded into this two-bedroom and one-bedroom house with little furniture and an old black-and-white TV set. Although poor, I am still unwilling to bow my head.
In this strange big city, I have no money to go to an excellent high school. But I have my own ideals and goals. Although I am in rags, I have my own dignity. This year is the next semester of senior three, and the college entrance examination is a turning point for me to realize my life dream.
What makes me feel a little dissatisfied is my parents, who always get up so early and leave, and come back so late every day. I really want to go to the park and blow by the river on weekends, but even this small request has not been met by God once.
No, we must wait until they come back today. I know they want to make money, not for me, but I don't want them to be so tired. I am willing to live a harder life. After all, I still have a long tomorrow.
A faint sound came from the stairs outside the door, so light, so weak, so slow. The sound approached slowly and stopped suddenly at the door.
After a long time, I slowly heard a slight metal collision, and an object was slowly inserted into the keyhole, which was a gentle rotating sound. The door opened quietly. "Be gentle, the child is asleep." This is the mother's voice.
I can feel her tiptoeing towards me.
There is no sound, but I can feel it. Light footsteps warm my heart step by step. "I licked the quilt again!"
Mother gently pulled the quilt, slowly moved to my side and slowly pulled it away. ...
From beginning to end, the lights at home didn't turn on and didn't make any loud noise. Only my parents stood on tiptoe and stepped on my heart step by step.
Pulling the quilt over my head, I tried not to make a sound, but tears fell down line by line. This night, I don't know how long I cried. I only know that the pillow is wet.
Men don't cry easily, but I will cry a thousand times tonight! How many years, how many days and nights! Every night, my parents tiptoe around the dark room. What am I still angry about?
Zhu Ziqing has a father's back, Shi Tiesheng has a mother pushing a wheelchair, Fu Cong has a letter from Mr. Fu Lei, and I, what do I have? I have my parents on tiptoe!
Parents are ordinary, but their love for their children is great and unparalleled, and it is the wealth of a person's life.
On tiptoe, my parents' love will never be forgotten in my life, and I dare not forget it!
Question 3: Tell me the most unforgettable thing and share it with your classmates.
Design intention: guide students to return to themselves, recall people and things around them, learn to feel the truth ignored by themselves, and extract people and things that touch their hearts from their own life reserves.
Teacher-student activities: teacher-student interaction.
Interlanguage:
Bai Juyi said: "People who touch people's hearts should not care about their feelings first." Sincere feelings are the easiest to move people. In real life, sometimes a word, an action and a look can move us. Grasp it, describe the cause and effect, and describe the specific details that move you. If you touch yourself, you will certainly touch others, cause others to sing, and give people ideological enlightenment and beautiful enjoyment.
Fourth, explore skills.
Question 4: In the article "Tiptoe", the author caught a subtle action of his parents. Besides, what else can he do to make the article concrete and rich?
Design intention: Guide students to explore some writing skills.
Teacher-student activities: teacher-student interaction.
Clarity: Detail description refers to the detailed and delicate description of some small things with artistic expression, some subtle behaviors and actions of characters and scene fragments in the works. It refers to grasping the subtle and specific typical plots in life and describing them vividly and meticulously.
Detailed description method:
(1) Extract tiny and vivid movements.
(2) language that captures the characteristics of people.
(3) Describe personality, appearance and behavior.
(4) Try to figure out the psychological activities of the characters.
(5) Describe typical scenes and objects.
Verb (abbreviation for verb) target detection
(1) sort out the most unforgettable thing I just told myself. Requirements: Be specific, about 100 words.
(2) Show students' works for students to comment on.
Design intention: Let students write their own oral stories with writing skills.
Teacher-student activities: students write and show their own achievements, and the teacher supplements them after the students comment.
Example:
Read the following text and see which paragraph is more affectionate.
But I can feel that my mother didn't go out, but seemed to come to my bed. I opened my eyes slightly, and my mother was standing by my bed, looking at me with waiting eyes. At that moment, I shed tears.
But I can feel that my mother didn't go out, but seemed to come to my bed. I opened my eyes slightly, and my mother really stood by my bed and looked at me. I clearly felt her eyes stroking my hair. Mom hasn't stroked my hair for a long time. Is she remembering the lost years? My mother's eyes touched my eyebrows and flooded my eyes. My eyes rolled a few times unconsciously, and her eyes gently massaged my eyelids like her gentle hands when I was a child. I know she makes me sleep well. My mother's eyes passed over my cheek as if looking for something. I know it is looking for its own shadow, and she seems to appreciate something. I know that appreciating art works has condensed her life's hard work. At this time, tears of disappointment gently slipped down my eyes.
The two-month holiday is finally over. I dragged my luggage to the station again. There were a lot of people in the station, most of them stood bored and yawned to kill time. I sat in the waiting room next to my father who insisted on coming. ...
In the dormitory, I am busy packing things, books, clothes, food ... properly solved, my father is on the side. ...
"Dad, have a rest." I looked at his busy back and said. "Well, rest for almost half an hour. You go and drink some water, and I'll wipe this mat again. Without a word, he went straight to wash the towel. After washing the towel, he wiped it hard, from top to bottom, from left to right, under the pillow and on the edge of the bed, as if carving beautiful jade. Dad is from love sweating. Despite the electric fan, inadvertently, his wet sweat dripped on the bamboo mat that had just been blown dry by the wind, looking around ... Finally, he bent down, straightened up, took a long breath and smiled, and I smiled at him. But suddenly, he rolled his eyes, gave a cry of "Oh", turned his back, as if he had received some orders, and lifted the pillow like a baby. There is still sweat on the pillow. ...
He walked around the bed and watched it again and again. "Is everything all right?" ……
Comments: It was a simple thing for my father to send me to school, but it is no longer "normal" and "simple" under the author's perceptual interpretation. Because the author slowed down and added touching details, the article easily resonated with others, giving people ideological enlightenment and beautiful enjoyment.
Sixth, the class summary
Play the father's love video of public service advertisement for Alzheimer's disease-he forgets many things, but he will never forget to love you!
Please express your feelings in one or two sentences.
(1) student summary
(2) Teacher's summary
Rodin said: Life is not a lack of beauty, but a lack of eyes to find beauty. There are many people and things that touch our hearts in life, but we just need to feel life with our hearts. When we feel the people and things around us with sensitivity and gratitude, life must be full and there must be a lot to write about.
Seven, composition practice
In the process of growing up, everyone will laugh, be moved, and of course there will be tears and sadness ... These are all indispensable experiences in life, and every bit is a precious asset in life. Did you have any unforgettable experiences when you were growing up? Do you want to share it with everyone? Recall it and write it down. The topic is self-made, not less than 500 words.
Attachment: blackboard design
Love life and love writing.
Detailed description method:
(1) Extract tiny and vivid movements.
(2) language that captures the characteristics of people.
(3) Describe personality, appearance and manners.
(4) Try to figure out the psychological activities of the characters.
(5) Describe typical scenes and objects.
Unit 1 Writing Lesson Plan 2
First, the teaching objectives
1. Stimulate students' writing enthusiasm, understand the relationship between writing and life, and enhance students' confidence in expression.
2. Guide students to observe carefully, grasp the characteristics of the scenery and capture the beautiful moments of life.
2. Learn from beautiful poems and master certain writing skills.
Second, the difficulties in teaching
Teaching focus:
1. Stimulate students' enthusiasm for writing and enhance their self-confidence.
2. Help students dig out the materials that can be written in life and guide them to observe carefully.
Teaching difficulties:
1. Master certain writing skills and then internalize them into abilities.
2. Select and refine writing materials.
Third, teaching strategies
1. Stimulate students' interest through activities, guide students to observe and accumulate writing materials.
2. Learn classics, analyze and summarize methods; Practice writing and experience the implementation method.
Fourth, the teaching process
(A) the introduction of new courses
It's September. From summer to autumn, the weather is getting colder and colder, the temperature difference between day and night is getting bigger and bigger, and many changes have taken place in natural scenery and even people's clothes. Have you noticed any changes in our campus?
The flowers of hawthorn fell, and small red fruits hung; The universe in the wall is in full bloom; Parthenocissus tricuspidata on the library wall has changed color; It gets cold in the morning and evening, and many people put on long-sleeved coats, but it is still very hot at noon. ...
Through these questions, the design aims to arouse students' concern about life and be a conscientious person; Pave the way for the following targeted observation.
(B) observation of the campus, the accumulation of material
1. initial observation: arrange group cooperation activities, and the whole class will voluntarily divide into four groups to start observation.
Design Intention Through this design, students can observe from a certain angle and focus on the observed object. Group cooperation can inspire each other and make up for each other's lack of observation. The name "campus billboard" can also be changed to other names. For example, "The Best of Campus", the most cute animal on campus-sparrow, the most festive tree on campus-hawthorn tree covered with red fruits, and the most mysterious corner on campus-basement ... not only can students carefully observe the relevant content on campus from different angles, but also enhance their interest in observation.
2. Students share observation results, and teachers guide in-depth observation.
(1) What did you observe? The students shared the results of their first observation.
(2) Can you draw the most impressive scene you have observed? Please try to draw a picture.
The result of sharing design intent must be cheerful, which can not only stimulate students' interest, but also remind students that there are so many distinctive and interesting places on campus that can help them accumulate writing materials. The purpose of drawing is to further guide students to observe carefully. Only when they can draw physical details can they be said to be careful. Many people may only have superficial views, and it is impossible to write vivid and specific words.
3. Re-observation: Complement the previous observation and complete the painting activities.
Students go back to the campus to observe again and complete the picture.
Design intention paves the way for accurate and vivid writing.
(3) Detailed description, changing pictures into words.
1. Think about it, how can I write it well? How will you present and record this impressive photo?
2. Students share the communication and make clear the key points.
The teacher does not directly tell the students the design intention, but inspires them to think positively.
3. Teacher's instruction: pursue classics and learn to write.
Example 1: Sha Qiu Si, Tianjin.
Old vines are faint crows, small bridges are flowing, and old roads are thin horses.
Summary: (1) The function of "modifier" is to grasp "the characteristics of scenery".
Reflective modifiers (shape, size, color, quantity, location characteristics)
(2) The position of modifiers (before and after nouns).
The grass crawled out of the soil, tender and green.
The design intention is to let students know the important role of modifiers through typical examples in class.
Practice consolidation: flowers (expanding words into sentences)
Example: ① A big white lily is in full bloom in the valley. There is a rose in bud in the vase, which is very elegant.
The design intention is to practice students using modifiers, write one sentence first, and also pave the way for writing more sentences, paragraphs and articles later.
Example 2: Reading-thinking.
Please look at the wonderful fragments in the text on the slide and tell us which features of the scenery are captured by these fragments and how they are reflected.
Inductive method:
(1) Rhetoric: personification, metaphor and parallelism.
(2) Multi-senses: sight and smell.
(3) Multi-angle: profile description, combination of reality and reality, and combination of static and dynamic.
(4) Write landscapes in a certain order.
The design intention is to help students quickly understand the writing method by reviewing classic paragraphs, and at the same time remind students to be a conscientious person when studying at ordinary times, and the accumulation of reading and reciting is to serve "for our use" in the future.
4. A small test, practical consolidation.
Write-grasp the characteristics, specify what to write, and introduce things in a certain order (up and down, far and near, etc.). ).
Second, write-modify the manuscript, multi-angle description (dynamic and static combination, multi-sensory, front and side description, etc.). ).
The design intention should be that it is still very difficult to write about the scenery. Here, through two different purposes of "writing", the methods summarized above are realized step by step. Writing is the most basic, putting together the big framework; The second writing is added and revised on the basis of the first writing, which not only practices students to describe the scenery from multiple angles, but also builds steps layer by layer to help students reduce the difficulty of writing and improve their writing.
(4) think positively and talk about feelings.
1. What do you think of these impressive places on campus?
2. Think and communicate.
Teachers can guide students in the following ways:
Nature has given us a lot of enlightenment: dripping water wears away the stone is telling us to persevere in doing things; Song Qing is not afraid of snow. Snow tells us to be strong. Cicada's endless "knowledge" is telling us to cherish time and live well; It is a revelation that the mature ears of rice bow their heads, so we should be modest and low-key. ,。
Some design intentions are written-well written-with ideas, which is the main line of the whole teaching design. Teachers guide students step by step, observe life and love writing.
(5) homework
Write a complete article describing a unique scenery of the campus in autumn in your eyes and introduce it to your primary school classmates.
Practice the design intention comprehensively, and let the students combine the scenery with the feeling.
Unit 1 Writing Teaching Plan III
1. Learn to observe and feel life, and discover the beauty of nature and human feelings from life.
2. Learn to write personal narrative articles, capture interesting, meaningful or impressive moments in life, and record your feelings and experiences.
Capture interesting, meaningful or impressive moments in life and record your feelings and experiences.
2 class hours
First, import
Students, many people and things are left in our memory. Some things make us unforgettable, and some things just leave a vague shadow in our minds; Some people, though strange, will also ripple in our hearts, while others, though familiar, are always ignored by us.
What makes us always ignore them? Is it because it is too insignificant? I think it's just the opposite, just because it's too familiar. In this lesson, we will start from the side and write about the scene in front of us, the things in front of us, or the familiar people and small things in life.
Second, please read, love life and love writing.
Art comes from life and is higher than life. In writing, we can choose materials from the following aspects:
1. Choose material from family life. We should care about ordinary people and things around us, discover truth, goodness and beauty with delicate hearts, tap the wisdom and philosophy in life, and cultivate keen, profound and comprehensive observation. Take the initiative to do some housework in family life, communicate with your family and find some vivid and interesting writing materials.
2. Choose materials from campus life.
(1) Campus life is rich and colorful, and students have different personalities. Usually good at observation, we will find that new things happen every day, different feelings every day, and subtle changes in classmates every day. Putting these observations into practice and writing them on paper is a vivid writing material.
(2) Mining the materials of various disciplines. The concept of big language tells us that language is everywhere, language is everywhere, and everything is language. A wonderful biological experiment class, a fierce basketball game and an unforgettable manual labor class are all good materials for composition.
3. Choose materials from social life.
(1) Go into nature and cultivate rich emotions and good observation. In different seasons, nature will show different colors; At different times, the weather will change rapidly: Wan Li is clear, it is raining cats and dogs, it is foggy, or it is snowing heavily. Learn to experience and capture instant inspiration.
(2) Pay attention to social life and expand the amount of information. In order to avoid superficial writing and lack of originality, we should pay more attention to social life, read more books, listen to the radio and watch more meaningful TV programs, expand the amount of information received, and let the source of life nourish our hearts.
Matters needing attention in material selection:
1. The entry point should be small. The selected cases should be "small" and "typical" "Small" mainly refers to the dribs and drabs in life and should not be written as "big". "Typical" mainly means not falling into the stereotype.
2. Describe it in detail. Grasp the details and write down the characteristics. You can carefully choose the most accurate and appropriate words to describe it through details such as appearance, language, movements and psychological activities, so as to make the article more vivid and infectious.
3. Feel life from multiple angles, express your unique experience, and connect the observed objects with your emotions to produce vivid and impressive feelings and experiences.
I. Writing exercises (1)
2. Students communicate the characteristics of autumn.
(1) can be described by color, sound and taste.
(2) It can be described by visual, auditory, tactile and olfactory methods;
(3) It can be described in azimuth order;
3. Precautions:
(1) is good at discovering, writing down what we usually observe and feel as writing material, and then making choices when using it.
(2) Pay attention to the specific season of "September" and write down the changes from summer to autumn. Be specific, for example, your feeling is "crisp in autumn", and you should describe this feeling with specific scenery.
model essay
Autumn is coming.
Autumn is coming, maple is wearing red gloves, chrysanthemum girl is wearing colorful skirts, ginkgo is fanning, waiting for a bumper harvest. Autumn is coming, and geese fly south on the word "people". It flapped its wings as if to say goodbye to everyone. Autumn came, and the tree wrote a letter in autumn, asking Sister Qiu Feng to help post it, and sent it to the squirrel. The squirrel saw it and quickly prepared the pine cones for the winter. Give it to the swallow. The swallow saw it, and quickly built a nest with grass to prepare for the winter. Send it to the little snake The little snake saw it and quickly went back to the cave to hibernate. Give it to the little fish, and the little fish will swim to the deep sea to keep warm. Give it to the children. The children saw it and immediately ran home, put on sweaters and ran to the garden to play. Autumn is coming, grapes are covered with vines, red, purple, white, light green and purple, colorful and beautiful; Apples are grinning, waiting for people to pick them; Corn put on a golden hat to tell everyone that the harvest season is here.
Second, writing exercises (2)
2. Student exchanges: impressive experiences and feelings in the new semester.
3. Method guide:
There may be many stories, feelings and ideas, so you can write a point where you feel the deepest. When writing, you can refer to the following topics:
① New campus, new environment
I am a middle school student, and I feel great.
My new deskmate is really humorous.
There is such an interesting place on campus.
Fan Wen:
My new classmate.
He is like a cold chrysanthemum, not so eye-catching, but fragrant and refreshing.
He is short, of medium height, with a high nose, bright eyes, black eyes revealing his profundity, and endless acne on his face revealing his youthful vitality.
After lunch, the classroom is like a vegetable market, and the noise fluctuates constantly. I feel that I am caught in a huge "quagmire". Teasing, playing, humming and memorizing words make people feel at a loss and restless.
Just then, a man caught my attention. He stood among the chickens like a crane. He kept a calm face and turned a deaf ear to the noise around him. He just devotes himself to his homework. He is really a red-violet who "emerges from the mud without dyeing".
"There is noise all around. Can you do your homework quietly?" I asked with questions and patted him on the shoulder.
"When you calm down, you won't feel noisy," he turned to me and said quietly. "First of all, you should be calm."
"alas! Your grades are so good and you are still so focused. " I sighed and said, "My grades are so poor, but I can't settle down to study." I'm finished! "
He may see the gloomy clouds on my face and comfort me by saying, "You can't say that: You should always ask yourself if your heart has sunk. You know, pearls always sink to the bottom of the sea, and duckweeds always float on the water. When my heart sinks, I don't care about the noise outside and gain something in the room. If you can do this, your grades will definitely improve. "
Suddenly, his words, like countless rays of sunshine, dispelled the fog in my heart, and my melancholy mood vanished in an instant, as if it were a glow in front of me, which inspired me deeply. Looking at his face, I saw the enthusiasm in his heart, his persistence and his tenacity.
His words, like a silver needle, pierced the floating bubbles in my heart and opened my heart; Like a compass guiding my way forward, like a submarine carrying me to the bottom of the sea to find more beautiful pearls.
I gratefully said to him, "friend, that's very kind of you!" Thank you for enlightening and encouraging me. In the future, you are my idol. "
Third, writing exercises (3)
2. Student communication: unforgettable things in the process of growing up.
Recall the things that moved or impressed you most in your growing experience, choose one of them, and talk with your classmates first to see if you were moved. Pay attention to smooth and clear language expression and complete narrative.
3. Precautions:
(1) Write down the cause and effect of this matter, and write down the cause, process and result.
(2) At the end, sort out your feelings, such as why you were impressed by this matter and what impression it left in your growth, which can play the role of pointing out the topic at the end of the article.
Fan Wen:
pass by
Tick-tock, tick-tock, time goes by. It's already past ten in the evening. Tired, I rubbed my sleepy eyes and continued to struggle.
Fuzzy footsteps outside the door, I don't think it must be my mother. A thick fragrance came to my nose. My mother brought me a cup of fragrant green tea and put it on my desk. I left carefully.
I knocked over the cup in a rage and shouted at her, "Don't let you in?" Mom zheng, turned to leave.
Looking at my mother's haggard figure when she turned around, I couldn't help shivering all over. ...
The sorghum outside the window is beautiful and mysterious in the moonlight. I sat on the windowsill, opened the window and let the cool wind hit me. The moonlight is bright and gentle, touching the earth like a god of love, but I have no feeling at all. Looking down at my broken cup, the tea on the ground was also reflected in the soft moonlight, as if there were endless tears flowing.
A tear fell from the tip of my nose and my heart was broken like that broken cup. ...
In my mind, I saw my mother's hard work, early wrinkles, black hair with white silk hidden, and tears fell down again. Why should I be angry with her? I can't stand the pressure of exams. Is there any reason to blame my mother?
Mom must be very sad, right? My heart is hurting.
I jumped off the windowsill and walked carefully to the door. Living room? No. Bedroom? No. I looked up and saw a faint light in the study. I looked through the door and my mother was ironing my clothes. In the dim light, I saw the white hair on my mother's head, which was so dazzling that I couldn't open my eyes.
I went back to my bedroom and stopped crying, but I remembered everything my mother had done for me. My mother spent most of her life for me, but I broke her heart again and again. I really want to say sorry to her. I really want to say I love you.
The moonlight outside the window is still so bright, reflected in the house and in my heart.
After a period of soul reflection, I suddenly understand that maternal love is always selfless, like moonlight, inclusive and silent. Although sometimes not understood, youth is still all over the world, and I should know how to cherish it.
So, I picked up the cup fragments on the ground and threw them back into the ocean of problems.